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World beyond a mirror
By horror4lover
29 November 2006
I've never write poetry, but ill give it a try.

rate me plz


is a mirror a portal to another world,
if it is i see what it'll be like.
left to right will change
to right to left,
east and west wil change
to west to east.
if their is another world
beyond a mirror.
won't everything be different
wont't everything change.
insteeed of horses
people will carrie instead,
insteed of war
there will be peace,
if not hate
it'll be love,
instead of murder
it'll be a kiss,
so it will be a differnt
and better world.
no murder,
no war ,
no hate,
no scream,
no cry,
not evan a tear.
in this world ,
is there a god,
is there a devil,
is there heaven,
is there hell,
is there death,
is there life.
beyond this portal
to a world,
i nor noone
will ever know,
what is boyond this
strange world,
boyond a mirror,
what lays and waiting
for someone to descover.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 29th November 2006
Interesting, and it did get better as it went on. I'm bearing in mind your age and admission you don't write poetry - I try but I'm not very proficient. 
 
Many typos. It may be dull to check and edit, you might not think it important, but there are far too many errors here to make this an easy read. There are many good ideas in this (and seemingly random ones too) but they need carefully structuring. I liked the end. 
 
Hope this helps, 
 
Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 29th November 2006
Ever read 'through the looking glasses'? That's what's on the other side according to Lewis Carol. Anyhow, it's an interesting thought...

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 29th November 2006
ineresting idea. typos, but I like the subject. :grin

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