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Corlee 2
By Witzl
01 December 2006

Corlee 2

 

Corlee’s hands,

tough as boot leather

They’ve picked cotton,

shucked corn – oh

those hands of hers, now

what they haven’t done

I’m sure that I don’t know.

 

And her face, well

People look – and look away

No beauty contest winner, her!

Ruts beneath her eyes, you’d think

that rivers had worn deep.

And mouth so bitter-sad

and sloping shoulders sunk.

 

And her poor legs –

They throb and ache

under support hose, but

there’s too much to support

and Corlee’s heart’s

not equal to the strain

 

But Corlee’s soul!

That’s soaring, eagle-high

As clean and crystal clear

as baby laughter,

waterfalls

And someday, someday soon –

she’s off to find the light.

 



Reviews
HI Witzl
Written by jean.day (2361 comments posted) 30th November 2006
I read both the Corlee poems, and I like this one better.  
I get the impression that she is someone you know. 
 
There are lots of nice touches - the idea that her support hose can't cope with the problems of her heart - which might be taken both literally and poetically. 
 
I hope she has some happiness before she dies.

Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 1st December 2006
I can almost feel the sweaty heat of the deep south in this Witzl. Some nice evocative touches. Like Jean, I hope she finds her salvation... 
 
happy writing 
Woody
Hello Witzl
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 1st December 2006
You'll smile when I tell you this, Witzl, but Corlee reminded me of poor old Uncle Tom in Uncle Tom's Cabin. Have you met him? The poor slave people of the USA, worn into the ground by hard work (especially in the cotton fields) but with souls that fly far above the rest of us. I really loved this poem and will read it several times I am sure. Yes, Corlee will be one of those who will go to heaven, I am sure! Lovely!

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Thank you for your comments, everyone. The Corlee in this poem is largely white, but she could really be any race. I don't know who is picking cotton nowadays in the U.S. South, but whoever is doing it is sure to be poor. Of course, black slaves used to do the brunt of the picking, but plenty of white people picked cotton too. My mother picked a bit herself -- not much -- and used to tell us about how badly it hurt your hands to do it. A cotton picker's hands would be fit for nothing else, nails split and scarred, fingertips swollen and calloused -- thus the derogatory expression 'cotton-picking hands.'

Written by ellipinnock (1784 comments posted) 1st December 2006
I also like this one of the pair best. I dread to use the word but it had a nice 'flow' to it. Very nice :) 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6959 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Read both of these Witzl. I really liked this one. It had a real sense of place and yime that the first didn't - although that could be my careless reading. Really liked your descriptions of Corlee. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.
Corlee 2
Written by beatricelouise (215 comments posted) 20th January 2008
The imagery in this poem is outstanding to me. I can almost see her (although in my mind, she is black), I can feel her hands of leather, sad lips and slumped shoulders. You have created a beautiful person who will one day have her reward. Lovely piece.

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