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Poetry
Heartbreak
By DarkRoseMistress
01 December 2006
The object of my affection has just ran away. Dedicated to those who feel the same way.Cry

Heartbreak

By Dark Rose Mistress
I was struck by Cupid’s arrow that day
Oh, how my fruitful heart flutters it way
Towards the heart which the maiden possess
Her beauty and poise as sweet as roses


Her eyes like sparkling gems of the west
Twinkling beauty which never rest
In her bed of beauty her heart lay
Oh, how her own self makes me sway


One fateful day all kisses were bitter
Full of poison and no more sweeter
Her heart turns black and cold
This emotion I will bear till I’m old


Sweet moments of pure pleasure
Twas turned sour, this I cannot treasure
For my soul, this taste I cannot take
For this bitter emotion was called heartbreak


Cry



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Awww...
Written by Fledermaus (3456 comments posted) 1st December 2006
That's a sad thing... And indeed something that's hard to forget. But, eventhough it's probably a cliche, you'll get over him sooner or later. So eventhough it probably feels like that right now, I don't think you will bear this emotion till you're old. 
Eat some chocolate, call your friends and go to the cinema. I think that (real life) friends are the best remedy for heartbreak.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Chin up love! Poetry as therapy I'm guessing, I hope it worked :) 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6851 comments posted) 1st December 2006
I'm guessing English isn't your first language - so full marks for attempting verse in a foreign tongue. I struggle to get by (Hello, thanks, etc0in only a couple of languages besides English. I couldn't write a word. 
 
Bearing in mind the above, I won't comment on your work directly. 
 
Phil.

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