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SURVIVAL....
By woody44
01 December 2006

 He paused by the scrubby stand of bush, its thorny leaves sharp against his black, leathery skin. Raising his hand to shield his eyes against the searing sun, he scanned the horizon. Nothing. Jabbing the crude spear into the baked earth he took a sip from the goatskin pouch slung around his neck. The water, warm and tasting of damp soil, slid easily down his parched throat.
    He had forgotten now how long he had been out there. Four days? Six? He thought of his parents back in the settlement, a collection of ramshackled huts set in a sweltering dust bowl. This had been their life ever since the famine. Eking out an existence as best they could. But Amwali knew. Knew it was only a matter of time before they too would succumb to the painful, mind-numbing starvation. 
    He let the goatskin bag drop back onto his chest. The drops of fetid water would keep him going a little longer. Maybe just long enough to see his hoped-for prey padding along the shimmering horizon.
    Things had not been too bad in the beginning. Film crews with their shiny new vehicles and antennas pointing skyward. Then the food trucks, lost in a haze of choking dust dropping their precious cargo of maize and rice. But then there was nothing. The shiny vehicles withdrew, the trucks no longer appeared along the potholed track. They were alone again...
     Amwali slipped from the shelter of the bushes, the mid-morning heat searing into his brain. He had to find something quickly, before he became too weak. Crouching low he began to move out again across the rain-starved plain...
     It had been his idea to try and find food. His father was too old, his mother too weak. They had pleaded with him to stay, told him that the men in their shiny vehicles and the trucks full of food would surely return soon. He`d kissed their unblinging eyes and set of towards the setting sun.
     It had been bitterly cold that first night. He lay huddled beneath a banyan tree and watched the stars as they traversed the inky black sky. He remembered his friends, the mud-walled school house, the scrape of chalk on shiny slate. He had enjoyed school, loved the unfolding of hitherto unknown new worlds. His teacher said he was clever, that he should try for a scholarship in the township. He had run home and told his parents. They asked who would look after them and feed the goats. The scholarship was not mentioned again...
     He moved slowly, the sun boring mercilessly into his blistered, aching limbs.He knew he shouldn`t be out at this time of day, but what other choice did he have.
     Then he saw it, faint and shimmering against the skyline. He shielded his eyes and looked again. A gazelle, young, its legs still wobbly, its head lost in the parched grass as it grubbed amongst the vegetation for anything of substance. He wet his finger and held it in front of himself. He felt the slight breeze on his fingertip and smiled. He was upwind of the young gazelle. 
      He moved cautiously forward until he was only yards from the animal, his slithering body hidden in the gently waving grasses. The smell of urine filled his nostrils as the animal relieved itself against the gnarled branches of a thorn bush. Amwali waited, his body rigid as the gazelle curled its tongue around the thorny leaves of the bush and tugged. As the animal chewed the young boy was suddenly filled with an overwhelming sadness. This animal too, was trying to survive. But then he thought of the settlement and his barely-alive parents, and he knew what he had to do. 
     The cry echoed across the plain as the spear pierced the young gazelle`s hide. For a second its eyes fixed on the young hunter before it collapsed onto the red earth, its legs twitching, the shaft of the spear pointing towards the sinking sun. Amwali quickly crossed the space between his hiding place and the stricken animal, his hand reaching for the knife in his belt.
      The cut was quick and clean, vivid red blood bubbling for a second on the surface before seeping into the pock-marked earth. Amwali cupped his hand and took a drink of the warm, sweet liquid. Now perhaps his family would not die. He brushed his hands briefly across his lips before looking skyward, his mouth twisting into a silent thankyou.
      It was as he was lifting the gazelle across his shoulders that the lioness burst from the long grass. Amwali watched in horror as the beast raced towards him. As the gap narrowed to a few yards Amwali turned his head and gazed for the last time at the setting sun as it dropped majestically below the orange-bathed skyline...

Reviews

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Beautifully written, but oh, I wish Amwali'd been able to take his gazelle home to share with his parents.
There ain`t no justice...
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Thanks Witzl. Yer life`s cruel ain`t it! I have been watching a re-run of `Lonesome Dove` in my opinion one of the best scripted `westerns` to come out of America in a long time. I hated it when Gus died, he was such an integral part of the story, but boy did it make for great scriptwriting. I`m just hoping `Return to Lonesome` lives up to the original. 
 
Not particularly relevent to the above story but I thought I`d get it off my chest anyway! 
 
Once again thanks for your time and comments 
 
woody
Gripping stuff....
Written by SammoR (216 comments posted) 1st December 2006
 
...a reminder to us that life (and death) does go on after the TV crews leave. 
 
Great descriptions, very evocative, we really feel for the character. Yeah, wish it could have had a better ending, but sometimes life sucks.  
 
Wonder, though, if Amwali had thrown the gazelle at the lioness, whether she'd have left him alone? But perhaps either it was too heavy to throw or he was too weak to throw it.....

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 1st December 2006
I thought of throwing the gazelle to the lioness too. But then Amwali would still be stuck without anything to eat or drink. What a choice -- quick death by lioness, or slow death by starvation. I think I'd go for the lioness myself, but then he had his parents to worry about . . . 
 
Lonesome Dove is Larry McMurty, right? I love his books, but have not read (or seen) Lonesome Dove. If you like Lonesome Dove, you might like One Thousand White Women by Jim Fergus (a book I like very much) -- or any other 'western' book by McMurty.  
 

Written by ellipinnock (1816 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Mesmerising read, woody. Thoroughly enjoyed this. 
 
Elli 
 
ps. did you mean unblinking for 'unblinging'?
Hi Woody
Written by jean.day (2908 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Well written piece. I really enjoyed it. I too wished he had sacrificed the gazelle to the lion - but maybe it wasn't a likely scenario. But you must have read Patterjacks stuff about the banyon nuts. But I suppose maybe the tree was too dry to produce nuts.
Gem.
Written by gerardconnolly (1354 comments posted) 1st December 2006
Really rewarding read, Woody. Making the point subtly without banging on. And something of a departure for you content-wise. For reasons too complex to explain I always warm to stories wrapped around the minutiae of life; or off the well beaten track of urban Weatern angst. I find it hard to drum up any interest in yet another tale of self obsessed endeavour. Yet this is so manifestly different. 
 
There is a wonderful short tale told by Norman Mailer ' The Greatest Thing in the World '. Its about a tramp buying and eating a doughnut. Look it up Woody, when you have a moment. It enunciates what I mean here much more eloquently than any words of mine and it is my guess it would be just your kind of thing.  
 
For now my compliments to you. A rarely seen other side to your amusing talents. Now off back into that scullery and get that pinny on! Herself will be back soon! 
 
Slan! 
 
PS Did all this really happen in Nottingham?

Written by coosh (1156 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Very well written, Woody. I've read/seen a lot of these types of tales (more in reality than fiction) and they're very often intriguing/thought-provoking/tragic. The description was extremely vivid and smooth. Great how you moved through the thoughts of the main character to the hunt/kill, having sown the image of the ephemeral, long-gone TV crews/food trucks, which for me remained as part of the backdrop throughout. At the risk of sounding like one of those poncey blokes off a book crit programme, it works on a few levels, from the individual experience of Amwali, to the broader aspects of exploitation/poverty/politics/aid, etc.  
You should get the missus to pop out more often. Cheers.

Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Thanks for your comments SammoR. On reflection, if I were to write the ending again, I would perhaps leave it at the point were Amwali is bent down over the gazelle and doesn`t here the lioness coming towards him - in other words, as in all good (!) stories, leave it up to the reader to form their own ending! 
many thanks 
Woody
thanks Elli...
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Elli, your comments too are much appreciated. I must admit I enjoyed writing this one! 
happy writing 
Woody 
 
ps. Unblinking - well spotted. Amazing isn`t it that no matter how many times you go over a piece, something gets missed! I think I also put an `of` in instead of `off` 
Must try harder! 
Thanks Jean..
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Valued comments Jean, thankyou. I`m afraid I haven`t read about Patterjack`s tree. Maybe after this I ought to. 
How is the book coming along by the way? Hope you are not running into too many snags. Either way, please let me know when it is ready for unleashing on the general public... 
 
all the best 
Woody
Gerard...
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Many thanks again Gerard for your much valued comments. This story, in a much more condensed form, was written several years ago. I tried to find it again a few weeks ago, but couldn`t, so I rewrote the whole thing from scratch. Not my normal `stuff` as you so rightly observe, but I did enjoy doing it. 
I`ll certainly look up the Mailer piece when I have a spare moment Gerard and let you know what I think. 
regards 
Woody 
 
ps I hope the Cromwell piece is still progressing favourably.
Coosh..
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Thanks David for your time and crit. I`m not a particularly political animal but I thought I could use it as a basis for a story. Thanks again... 
 
 
Woody

Written by Snodlander (531 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Very little to add to the above. Nice short story. Just one point. Where is this set? It seems to be set in Africa, but the reference to the Banyan tree confused me
Whoops!..
Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Slapped wrist time I`m afraid Snoddy! The Banyan is of course an Asian tree! Sorry about that. Must do better research. Thanks for your time and comments. 
Woody

Written by Snodlander (531 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Oh, and he should approach the gazelle from downwind. If he was upwind, it would mean the scent would be blown towards the gazelle.

Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
I`ve always had my ups and downs..but a very valid point and thanks for pointing it out. 
Woody

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Nothing much to add to he comments above - so just to say - a thoroughly good read. Absorbed. 
 
All the best, 
 
Phil.

Written by woody44 (876 comments posted) 3rd December 2006
Thanks Phil. All I`ve got to do now is get rid of that damn Banyan tree... 
 
happy writing 
Woody

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (5077 comments posted) 4th December 2006
wow this obvioulsy affected a lot of people woody, and I'm not surprised: for me the trick you pulled off was to make us care about the young hunter so quickly and then turn the concern into tragedy, neatly and quickly done. And as gerard said no time for existential angst when you're fighting for survival 
Good work 
Jane

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