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Winter quietly Approaches
By GILLY
02 December 2006
When working in a Casina back in 87 I wrote this. Frankly i'm scared after I sent the last one,(the yester-e ),but lets be real it was pretty bad. I may have even been drunk when I thought it up. This one though is more the sentimental thing. Anyway...


Our friend the wind floats
Over Tahoe’s belly.
Her skin contracts and ripples
Bringing a chill to the blood
As winter quietly approaches.
 

Afternoon travel to Stateline
Along Tahoe’s belly
Her coldness brings
My leather face a sad smile
Overcoming her light beauty
As winter quietly approaches.
 

She ignores my gazes
Giving her cold responses 
With a twinkle
And I am in lust with her
Until snowflakes the sized of dollars
Cover her banks
Pushing me and desires away
As winter quietly approaches.

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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
Well, either you were drunk when you wrote yester-e or someone had been slipping stuff in my drink when I read it :) 
 
I liked this a lot more, I thought the line breaks were a tad awkward in places but I really enjoyed the read. Some nice imagery in here. 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 2nd December 2006
I enjoyed this, much better than the last - sorry if I was a bit blunt. As Elli says, some really nice imagery. I particularly liked: 
 
Over Tahoe’s belly. 
Her skin contracts and ripples 
 
All th best, 
 
Phil. 

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