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Poetry
Nothingness
By roxyhope
06 December 2006
A once perfect canvas
Now lies in a sea of colors
Much like her creamy complexion
Is overtaken by the bruises of reality
The hues of unhappiness
Have left dark shadows beneath her eyes
Letting others see
This great illness building within her

Lost in the world of insecurity
Their words slap her
Much like the tide hits the shore
New lacerations form on
Her once beautiful thighs--
                         the only place they can hide--

Drowning in a world of misery
She resorts to her only remedy...
A new wall must be built to save her
 From an untimely destiny
Not so long ago she was an
Open book
But today the pages
Are wiped clear...
Not a single sign
Of humanity left

Only a world
Of
Nothingness

Reviews
Hi Ms Roxy
Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 6th December 2006
Ms Roxy, you paint with a brush able to define intricate detail. Sad yet beautiful; you talk of nothing being there and yet the artist paints a seductive trail leading to your feet. (And besides you do this every year when the temperature falls ---- get that heater turned on and have a nice hot cup of soup. ---- Then the star will shine on your fairies). ---- Thank you (for a wonderful short stroll through autumn’s

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 6th December 2006
i agree with the above. :grin

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 6th December 2006
I liked some of this very much but it didn't really add up to enough for me - if that makes any sense! Thought the first stanza was strong but then it lost impact for me. Others clearly disagree though! 
 
Elli
heyloo =
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 24th December 2006
trying again...heyloo =)
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 24th December 2006
love it all, except that last book metaphor. wiping pages clean seems too much a wholesome image 
 
well done! 
 
x clo x

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