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Who shall Judge
By whitewolf
08 June 2005

Who shall judge 

Walking the streets of a dirty town

Not a penny given on this daily round

In a doorway he shall make his bed.

 Like any king he will rest his head.

Newspapers alone provide a cover,

 On balmy nights he needs no other

And silent stars will be the sheep

That lulls his senses into sleep.

 

Stiff old bones the morning wakes

Naught but dew, parched lips do slake

As painfully he makes his way

To pass another endless day.

Here is a man whose mother's bliss

Bestowed on him his maiden kiss

A man who loved, laughed and cried

Who looked upon his work with pride.

 

He cheered, drank and loudly cussed

This man once full of youthful lust,

Fought for a country in bloody strife

Made a family and loved his wife

And he who watched in desperation

When all he loved in life was taken.

Shame on those who pass him by

And cast upon him judging eye

 

Reviews
Social Poem
Written by deprecor (6 comments posted) 8th June 2005
Extremely nice poem. I liked how you managed to present the life of this person. Very good social poem, this piece will make us think and help.
it could happen to ME
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 8th June 2005
good piece, you see people living on the streets and to be honest I dont think that a lot of us see "them' as people, they are non-people, shadow people and yet everyone as got a story to tell 
again a good piece 
Bernie

Written by whitewolf (7 comments posted) 9th June 2005
thanks for the read.  
I find it very sad to see street people and often wonder how they came to be in that situation 
 
ww :cry
it's realistic..
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 7th August 2006
like maipenrai said.. we see people on the streets.. (especially here in the philippines, every corner is occupied) and we don't see them as people. we see them as objects to be avoided. we just try not to deal with them. honestly, have you ever met someone who extends a hand to them. there was one poem that said: "to offer a hand, means to risk involvement." but in the later parts, the poet said: "yet he who does nothing, becomes nothing." 
 
nice poem.. very realistic.. 
 
keep writing! 
 
-rilLie 
 
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