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Crimson Moon
By andie
06 December 2006
Actually a song lyric, but close enough! thanks for viewing :)

CRIMSON MOON


She went to the land of the Pharaohs
Not sure what to do, "just following orders"
She likes the place but cannot stand the heat
So she said on our last night together

She's one of the toughest women I know
But she's like a kitten in bed
The moon dances on a pair of lovers
As we both reach heaven and back

**

Like a sweet-smelling jasmine
She haunts me in my dreams
And stains my sheets with the saps from her skin

I haven't cried for a while
And I don't want to start now
And yet I can't with all my might
Have her back by my side

**

On sultry evenings I search through the temples
Chasing after her most elegant figure
An oriental among cloaked Bedouin;
"Do you know where they could have taken her?"

The sight of her flowing long raven hair
Watched by a flame-coloured moon
Against the starless, velvet night sky
The angel awaits her coming doom

**

I know this could be judgement
From the hundreds of souls
That had fallen victim to my roaring hammer

But let the crimson moon be my solitary witness
That should harm ever come to her
It's eye for an eye and life for a life
And should harm be brought upon her
The earth would offer you no shelter from this broken lover

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Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 6th December 2006
This kind of feel in-between poetry and lyrics for me which gave it a slihgtly odd style...I liked some of it very much though, particularly stanzas 2 and 5. 
 
Elli

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