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Dublin, 1941
By Fledermaus
06 December 2006
I don't know how historically correct this is, as I only found out about this event an hour ago on wikipedia.

My second piece on Dublin's history, while I've never spent more than a few days there...

Tom leant forward over the lined papers and checked the errors with his pencil. He scratched his head. Paidin O'Connor had deserved a D, but he knew how much this exam could mean for the boy. He was brilliant at mathematics and physics, but where geography was concerned the poor lad was a complete disaster. Yet somehow his remark had been right. Tom had heard him say it to one of the other boys as they left the classroom.
" Who cares about geography? The borders are changing every day."

And of course he had been right. Today Moskow was in Russia, tomorrow it could be in Germany. The whole world map had been turned upside down those last years and it didn't look as if it was going to change soon. This very city had been part of the British Empire only a few decades ago. He thanked heaven it wasn't so anymore. In spite of history, he sympathized with the allied cause, but he was happy that at least Ireland had managed to stay neutral in this bloody war. For Tom O'Reily life went on as it always had. He taught the children how to write and how to calculate and of course the Moskow was the capital of Russia.

He marked the incorrect answer and sighed. It'd be such a shame if he had to fail Paidin, but the rules were merciless. Going to university and studying mathematics... The boy knew what he was good at, but somehow it seemed such a distant dream. His parents weren't too wealthy. Paidin's father was a fireman. One of those brave heroes that had been to Belfast after the attacks with Easter. He had certainly saved a lot of lifes, but he wasn't paid accordingly. It was a calling, not something that'd make one rich.

Tom's thoughts drifted away as he reminded himself of Paidin's father. Somehow the raid on Belfast had shocked them all. When the Germans bombed Britain it seemed far away, but Belfast was on their own island. Until then, Mr. O'Connor had just been pumping water out of flooded basements and getting the neighbour's cat out of the trees, but that Easter he had been sent to Belfast to fight the fires of the blitz. Ever since he returned he was a different man. Instead of beer he drank whiskey and he was but a shadow of the cheerful man he used to be. His jokes were cynical and he never sang anymore. God knew what he had seen. He never talked about it.

Tom stared at the radio. He didn't want to turn it on. The few rumours he heard on the streets were bad enough. The whole world was one big battlefield, from Peking to London and from Egypt to Java. If they hadn't been independent he'd now probably be a Wild Goose in some trench... Or dead.

No he wouldn't listen to the news. Instead he'd make himself another cup of tea ond continue correcting the exercises.

He walked to the kitchen en filled the kettle with water. Then he walked to the window and looked at the courtyard where a teenager was playing with his hurley. As he waited till the water would boil, he watched the boy's tricks. Tom had never been good at sports, but he liked watching the acrobatic action. The boy tossed the ball in the air and catched it on the edge of his stick. Then he banged it against the wall and grabbed it. He looked up and waved at Tom.

Tom smiled and wanted to wave back, but then he heard a heavy buzzing sound and he saw how the teenager looked up towards the sky. The humming became louder and soon it was roaring rather than buzzing. It was as if an aircraft was landing on his roof, but still the noise increased.
He opened the window and leant outside, trying to see what was going on. The boy pointed at the clouds above him, but Tom couldn't see anything. The teenager shouted something, but by now the sound was so loud that Tom could only hear the propellers.
Then he spotted them. It wasn't one plane, it was a whole swarm of them!
He looked at them in awe as they soared over the North-Side. Then he blinked. Did he see that right?
He heared a whistling sound and then an explosion so loud he thought his eardrums would burst. Yellow light flashed above the roofs in front of him and a moment later black clouds rose behind the houses.
The sound of the planes waned and just as sudden as they had appeared, they were gone.

Air-raid alarms screamed and he heared the sirens of the fire-trucks.
Tom turned off the fire and put on his coat. They were a neutral country. What was this all about? Why would anyone attack Dublin? He had to see what the target had been.

Tom ran down the stairs and through the streets. As he neared the site he saw that more curious people had gathered to see what was happening.

" Just like '16", an old man said and he shook his head.

But whatever 1916 must have been like, Tom couldn't imagine that the city had ever before burned like this. He wanted to see which building had been hit. Surely there must have been a reason for the raid.

" Halt! This is a restricted area."
A garda kept the crowd away from the site and the people obeyed grudgingly.

Someone pulled Tom's sleeve and as he looked, he saw it was the teenager.
" Did you see 'em, Mr. O'Reily? It was the feckin' Jerries. They mistook us for English. Say, isn't tha' the street where Paidin O'Connor lives?"

Tom realized he was right and he swallowed a lump. Paidin and his folks could be all dead! Just a minute ago he had been checking his geography exam and now he could be perishing in the flames...

He went to the garda.
" Are there any casualties?'
" I don't know."

Tom looked around nervously, but then the teenager tapped him once again.

" If you're searchin' for Paidin, he's over there."

And he pointed at a little boy who was standing in front of his parents. Tears were rolling over their cheeks as they stared at the flames and the ruins of their street, but at least they were alife...

Reviews
A little simplistic...
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 6th December 2006
Nothing wrong with the storytelling here, Old Mouse. A few typos. Nothing terminal. And certainly a story. Bit banal and predictable from my point of view. But perhaps a non Irish audience may see that differently 
 
It is always difficult for an outsider who has maybe only a heresay acquaintance with Ireland during the period of your choice here to set a credible historical tone. I would caution anybody looking at Ireland's attitude to the Second World War, and more specifically the troubled subject of its neutrality, to be aware, not of the bald soi disant facts outlined on Wikipedia, but the lasting effects of the Irish Civil War. 
 
Largely ignored by English history, this tragedy arguably has had a much deeper engrained effect on Irish attitudes to events beyong their own shores than anything else I can think of in the recent past. My own family even now bear the scars of it and my own darling Daddy, God rest his soul, went to his grave refusing to belive that Michael Collins was killed by an Irishman. The infamous incident of the old former Anti Treaty IRA Men walking free from Dublin's goals- Mountjoy; Kilmainham, etc, set free by the British; only to be re arrested at the gates and marched back inside by their own fellow countrymen alongside whom they had but a short time ago been fighting, is one of those matchless ironical farces you could not invent. ' Only in Ireland ', as they say. Thus Sean McBride's notorious bitter welcome for an independent Irish Republic ' Same prisions. Different Guards '. The majority of the [Official ] IRA supported Germany as against the fundementally pro British stance of the De Valera Government. Ireland was, as ever, split. Having ' won ' the civil conflict, the old nationalist patriot hero, De Valera, in victory, turned into Oliver Cromwell and shot and banged up the bloody lot of them. 
 
I digress. Nothing wrong with the writing but if you are to meaningfully conjure up the mise en scene of an extraorinarily complex senario, my advice would be to use a little more source material than Wikopedia to carry conviction. Your senario is to me a tad simplistic in its intimations. 
 
But a thought provoking piece. Well done! 
 
Slan!
Good read...
Written by SammoR (109 comments posted) 7th December 2006
 
Incidentally, if you want to read a novel set during the Emergency as the Irish call the Second world War, then read Belton's novel - 'A Game Played With Sharpened Blades', I think. It tells the story of a year in the life of the Schrodinger, he of cat fame, in Dublin. The year, I believe, is 1941. Not read it myself, but it's on my to-do list for next year.
Erratum...
Written by SammoR (109 comments posted) 7th December 2006
 
...the novel is actually called 'A Game With Sharpened Knives'. Author is Neil Belton.
Thanks Gerard and SammoR
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 7th December 2006
Gerard - Thanks for the information. In the last years I became more and more interested in Irish history, but my knowledge there is mainly limited to the 'Dark' and Middle Ages. 
Somehow the Easter Rising too seemed a heroic (but clumsy) historical event, but the civil war is certainly confusing for an outsider. I still don't know if it was an all out war or a sort of extreme version of the 'modern' Troubles. 
 
The main character of this story is of course too young to remember that war, but as it seems that even today the civil war has left its traces, it'd be indeed logical if people'd base their opinions on it. 
I certainly didn't do much research on this one (hence the warning in the introduction), as I came across that paragraph on wikipedia by accident and I started writing immediately. 
 
SammoR - I'll certainly see if I can find that book. As said above, I became more and more interested in Ireland's history as it indeed seems to be a forgotten corner of Europe. From Gerards comment I gather that it wasn't exactly a sort of Switzerland on an island...

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 8th December 2006
Interesting story Fledermaus. I guess all this historical stuff does have its dangers. There's always going to be someone out there who questions the facts/context of your story. That shouldn't stop you though, just a little more research... 
 
Enjoyed this. A simple but effective tale. To be honest, I'm not sure the context of this story is entirely relevant anyway. It could have been told within the context of any disaster. 
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 12th December 2006
Thanks Phil. 
Indeed that's the risk of historical stuff. especially if one hasn't done his research well... 
It's a complicated thing to get the atmosphere right. Facts are one thing, but people's emotions quite another. I think that a character such as Tom O'Reily, with an attitude disconnected from his country's recent history, is possible, but as Gerard points out, perhaps not very likely.

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