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Poetry
A Mind's Affair
By roxyhope
07 December 2006
The wisdom of our unspoken truth makes love to my slowly parting lips
As our eloquence unfolds before me
The limbs of controversy entwining around us,
Permitting no escape
Your hot wet kisses articulate the truth behind the flood of words poured upon my very soul
For years our hearts have devoured one another
But it is only now that our actions are able to speak
The songs of love caress my satin skin as your mysterious eyes wash over me
The heat of passion radiates between us
Creating an endless desire
But your touch has yet to find my skin
The rhythm of my heart sets the pace
To a rendezvous of illusions
The aching within can no longer deny itself of the ecstacy surely awaiting
And into your arms you pull me gracefully
This darken cell of mine miraculously erupts into a world of bliss
With a quick snap of the wrist you unfasten my hair,
The long strands fall mischievously
Upon my enticing shoulders
With trembling hands you manage to loosen the cloth
Concealing my womanly beauty
The powder white robe falls listlessly to the barren floor
And I stand before you, revealing the
Voluptuousness your body pangs for
Perhaps out of fear or perhaps out of astonishment
You allow me to stand in my nakedness for what seemed like hours
The only movement is in our breathing
I watch as your eyes whimsically dance upon my swollen bosom
And it is in that moment that I reach out to you for the first time
My warm hand gently cups your crimson cheek...
Before you can utter anything,
I lean in to whisper that for once no words need to be said between us
My feverish breath rests upon your neck as I allow my lips to discover
The only part of you left untouched by me
My moist kisses wash over you, not denying any of your flesh their presence
It does not take long for your own needs to take over
And you lay me down so you can explore my every curve
Your kisses rain down upon me much like your words,
Leaving no doubt in my mind that this is meant to be
A wetness begins to form between my thighs
Encouraging,
Begging,
Pleading
For your next move
Finally your manhood plunges deep within me,
And it is in that moment of heated pleasure
That my eyes flutter open
To the laughter of Reality
For all along this was merely
A mind’s affair.........

Reviews

Written by Clifftown (642 comments posted) 7th December 2006
As I've said numerous times before, I'm no poetry expert, but this read like a excerpt from a Mills and Boon novel to me. 
 
I think this would be a lot more effective if it were shorter and less graphic - you certainly don't leave anything to the imagination! :)

Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 7th December 2006
My, my, my Ms Roxy, is there no limit to the sphere from which you find subject matter. You have taken the personal and offered it to us all without taking away your dignity, the mark of a creative poet and quality person of the passionate female persuasion. This is not the work of an adolescent searching for romance in the pages of some periodical, this comes from the heart, the real thing no less. I'm spell bound by the quality of your offering and will return looking for more, and more; thank you.
I'm afraid it doesn't work for me...
Written by ainsel (56 comments posted) 7th December 2006
I always feel that the first rule of successful erotic poetry is that it needs to have an emotional resonance. This one leaves me cold; there's no sense of personal engagement, just a lot of rather jaded imagery.  
 
The title confused me a little, too, as it raised the possibility that there are not in fact two participants in this encounter, but only one.  
 
I think it could be improved with a little less heavy breathing and a little more personality. 
 
ainsel

Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 8th December 2006
Alan Titchmarsh reveal yourself!

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 8th December 2006
Well it was certainly very descriptive! 
 
I liked this. I think you wrote it very well. 
 
As mentioned above, it could have been better if it was slightly shorter and pehaps just a little less explicit in some places. 
 
Powerful stuff though. 
 
Best wishes, 
 
E

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 9th December 2006
I think ainsel hit it on the head as far as I'm concerned. I would have liked a little more emotional content and a bit of information about the characters involved. Otherwise it becomes, for me, just a descripton and, as such, a bit 2 dimensional. I wasn't sure the ending worked but I did like the very beginning. 
 
Elli

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