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The rain upon my window cill
By sheppard
09 June 2005

From full to empty!


The rain upon my window cill has brightened up my day,

Now the feeling of sadness has finally gone away,

The house used to be so busy & so full of noise,

With friends & Family and children  playing with their toys.

Now those days are over the families flown the nest,

This time last year I laid my Love to  his rest.

I'd like a visit from my boys, but times not on their side,

They both have familes  to care for, now both have taken a bride.

So I sit & watch the raindrops, to pass away my hours,

It would be nice if they could call, with chocs or some flowers,

Once there were not enough hours in my busy day,

Now watching Raindrops on the cill, Passes my time away.

Reviews

Written by whitewolf (7 comments posted) 9th June 2005
I am afraid this comes to a lot of people including me. You wrote the feeling of almost isolation very well. 
 
well done 
 

Written by sheppard (36 comments posted) 9th June 2005
Thank you. 
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The Rain Upon my window cill
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 10th June 2005
Sheppard. I felt so sad reading your poem - it is sad.I know. 
Your boys will always be your boys remember that. They have different demands on them now- their loyalty to their new families shows that you have done a wonderful job in bringing them up.I understand where you are coming from.-Take heart and keep writing poetry. 
Ladybird.
deserves praise
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 10th June 2005
an evocative work 
i hope you realise your writing gives others pleasure- i certainly appreciate

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