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Errr... Holiness...?
By rilLie
11 December 2006
because of the four days without school, my mum took it as a time for clean-up -- meaning my sister and i will clean up the junk my brother's thrown around the house for the past decade and my dad sleeping on the couch, my mum watching "The Buzz" (this cheesy gossip show) and my brother strolls along, messing up more of the house, leaving my sister and I to do all the work...

anyway, I found this while I was working around and I studied the handwriting, and found that it was mine... I found taht it was from two years ago, when I was in fifth grade.. funny that I don't remember that much from that year...The only thing weird is... that I actually seemed Holy.. which is as weird as seeing a cow walk on only two feet...

I wonder how that happned? XP


I have seen,
all the beauty around me.
I have heard,
pleasent neighs of the herds.
I have felt,
all the love of God.
I have lived,
a priveleged life, just to have one.

Everything is done,
for a purpose, special and good.
Everyone is born,
to change the lives of others.

I have lived, experienced a lot,
make mistakes that has helped me so much.
Now I've learned, that there's a
purpose for all, and the purpose of life,
is life's purpose (modern life RilLie note -- was I that weird?)
and the purpose of life
is to change another life.
So, go out! Change the world (another note -- now I'm feeling cheesy..)
do your best in serving the Lord.

Serving the lord is serving others,
which is done by the best of efforts.
Giving a gift you made yourself,
can change others, even myself.
Everything you do,
can change others for good or for bad.

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Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 11th December 2006
Just shows hw much you've developed rilLie. I've certainly noticed a greater maturity in your writing in the last week or so. 
 
I think many of us might be embarrassed by things we wrote in our youth. 
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 12th December 2006
yes, very much. :grin thankee.

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