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By no1butClo
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11 December 2006 |
eeeuuuurrrggghh I'm not sure about this, the whole 'fitting in' thing was a problem we all had and I don't want to drag out the memories, but this sort of came to mind during a free today, comments welcome, as ever
clo x The doll-like face use to stare at me with glass eyes, see-through, impenetrable.
Her smile never reached them before it faded from cheeks frozen in a slight blush, at a compliment perhaps.
A blonde sweep was brushed aside and she kept walking, keeping her heels in check so she could glide past the masses, stare straight through them.
On the other end of that stare - impaled - that's where I remember being, school was summed up in those moments. Socially inept, working my way around the outcrowd. I never made it, society left me behind after Summer Ball.
Bullshit. |
Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 11th December 2006 | Yep, all bullshit. The games kids play are worth nothing in the real world. Often the coolest, prettiest types come to nothing. When I was thirty-five(ish) I went to school reunion. I hadn't seen many for seventeen years. Funny how sad some of the incrowd were. Thanks for this. Enjoyed. All the best, Phil. | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 11th December 2006 | Phil is right: all those games have no currency in the real world. I never made it to the school prom: no one invited me! After leaving school, my life truly began. Looking back, being a nerd was something of a blessing. Nothing else hurts after that kind of rejection. I like to think that the popular kids I went to school with never mastered the art of being rejected as fully as I. Suffer when you're young, reap the benefit when you're older. Someone once told me that all really great writers are people who suffered when they were young, with almost no exceptions. Isn't that great news? Somehow I cannot picture Dostoyevsky or D H Lawrence as the popular, trendy kids of their age. . .
| Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th December 2006 | mmmm liked the ending to this - bullshit indeed! I liked the idea of an 'outcrowd' as well. Typos in the first line? Interesting stuff clo. Elli | Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 11th December 2006 | Very nice Clo, loved the image of the cold, glass doll at the beginning. I was always aware of that sort of thing going on, but I chose to block it out (i'm good at that ). My own, real friends were the ones who mattered the most. Liked this lots, E
| :) Written by kitten_princess (31 comments posted) 12th December 2006 | I can think of so many people like the girl in your poem... The fourth stanza hit me, it seemed to be pretty much me... I hope Witzl's right about the nerd/success connection... There might be hope for me yet! Lovely stuff. Kitten xx | Written by no1butClo (338 comments posted) 12th December 2006 | thanks to all for reviews =) I'm interested, Witzl, in your point about suffering and writers, I don't like to think the two are connected - it seems a very morbid way to look at things - but I think all the suffering we have to deal with in life is relative, no-one is immune to it and no-one has everything that possibly could go wrong all at once [although some have come close, ain't that right princess? ;-P] Glad you liked it everyone, keep writing clo x |
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