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The joys of parenthood
By cordialfreedom
12 December 2006
this was written on holiday,while my daughter was out with friends

Waiting
waiting
still waiting

What`s that?
siren!
waiting
waiting
nothing,
breathe.

waiting
waiting.

How long now?
What time is it????

waiting
waiting,
butterflies
drink tea.

wait
wait
wai
OH FOR GOD`S SAKE
worry
worry
wait
wait.

CAR
home
breathe.

wait/worry.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6632 comments posted) 12th December 2006
Yep, with you on this one. Very repetitive, but it works for me. 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 14th December 2006
I really liked the idea of this - im not sure all of the single word lines worked for me - a bit too broken up but an effective piece nonetheless. 
 
Elli

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