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The Table
By jean.day
13 December 2006
Another U3A offering. The topic was to animate an object. I redid it to make it 750 words because that is the maximum allowed on Bonzer - if any of you know of that on line magazine.

The Table


It's pretty dark and lonely down here. I don't get nearly as much attention as I used to. I was the centre of my world for most of my life, and now that I am considered too old and not posh enough for my owners, they put me down in the basement, away from the comings and goings in the house.

It's not that I am not handsome. I am made of real oak , and I must admit my most recent owner did a good job of refinishing me to make my wood shine and all the natural grain of the wood came into its greatest beauty. But then he covered me with an oilcloth, so now nobody can even see how beautiful I am.

I am round - but I stretch in the middle so I can be made into a large oval table, bigger than my previous owners ever needed. I had four chairs sitting around me, cheap things, painted various colours - nothing like my quality, but I knew my owners couldn't afford anything more. They only put a cover on me when they had meals.

I originally came from my lady owner's family who lived on a farm along way away. They had a big family, but as the children grew up, they had furniture in excess of their needs. My lady chose me specially to take with her when she married. She was the one who polished me and kept me nice and without a mark. Her children, two girls called Judy and Jeanie, were not so very careful. They sometimes put hot cups down on me, and my lady shouted at them, and so she should.

Yes, I was the centre of their house. Not only did they eat on me, but the girls and their mother who was a teacher did their homework on me. They played bridge on me, cut dresses out on me, and put their heavy sewing machine on me too. The man of the house sat with his newspaper sprawled over me late at night while he drank beer.

But then, one day, I was pulled apart and taken down to the basement. I was being replaced. I couldn't believe it. I got a glimpse of the new table - and it was shiny and I could hardly believe it - veneered wood. There were matching chairs and although the table was round like I am, it had nowhere my depth and quality. I thought my owners must have taken leave of their senses.

So that was my first basement - and I was pretty much ignored there. The girls had gone off, and my owners didn't need more than one table in their house. But a few years later, I had hopes that I was going to be resurrected. Judy’s husband thought I looked very smart, and he carried me carefully into the truck and padded me for the 400 mile journey to their home.

But when I got to his new house, I was disillusioned yet again. That shiny fake thing that my other owners had had in their living room, was now being moved into Judy's house in her living room, and I was put down in her basement. I will say that my new man enjoyed it when he sanded and polished me up to make me look cleaner and smarter, but then he covered me up again, and here I have been ever since.

I am near the washer and dryer, so they use me to put the washing on. I have a plastic pail of clothes pegs on me, which they use when it is nice enough to hang clothes outside (although since my Judy died, her man doesn't do that very much). Above me are big oval pictures of my original owners - from the farm where I was first used - so that is nice. Judy used to come to talk to them, and enjoyed seeing them there in their old fashioned glory, but now that she is gone, I expect they will soon be gone too. Judy's man isn't much for sentiment.

So I go into my 100th year - as strong and as useful as I was when I was created - always living in hope that one day, one of Judy's children will remember me and put me back in my rightful place as centre of their world.

Reviews
Struggled
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 13th December 2006
I think the initial setting, in the basement does not draw in the reader, maybe if it started with the table being moved ...

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 13th December 2006
Personally, I was drawn in right away by the idea of a fine old table left to rot in a basement. My only consolation is that in North Dakota, where I am imagining this table now resides, it is too cold for termites. 
 
I love wood, and now I am just itching to get out my belt sander, my Danish oil and a couple of old rags and have a go at that table!  
 
For those of us who can imagine how things feel (I kiss my old clothes goodbye and weep over my children's toys when my kids -- also in tears -- thin them out), this one is spot-on. I still ache to think of our wonderful old formica table, a hideous grey, white and steel thing, but much beloved, given to a cousin to be ill-treated, seldom wiped, and finally, indifferently discarded.  
 
Hi Jean
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 13th December 2006
A great little idea. By investing an inanimate object with thoughts and feelings you really got me looking at the world from an alternate perspective. Well done. 
 
Like Witzl i think life does imbue objects with more than the some of their parts. There was an old horshoe that sat next to the open fire when we were kids. Its in the garage now, covered in cobwebs and rust, but it still feels good to hold. Its like a conducting rod for emotions. Hope i'm not weird! 
 
Best regards 
 
leo
Thanks Witzl and Leo and Johnnybg
Written by jean.day (2266 comments posted) 13th December 2006
The table is now in Minnesota, but your right - no termites there.  
 
Nice idea Leo - having something you value being a conduting rod for emotions.

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 14th December 2006
What a great concept, giving life to an inanimate object and giving it a voice and story. I think we people invest a lot in certain things,furniture, toys etc and it is comforting to think they could reciprocate . I think with your narrative skills there is a not more mileage in this idea and Iv'e just noticed another story on the site. 
cheers 
J

Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 14th December 2006
I got to the end of this and thought to myself, 'I've just read a story about a thinking table.' It sounds ridiculous, but I was drawn into this right from the start. That shows how well this was written.  
 
For me, it doesn't so much give an alternate perspective, just reinforces my romantic idea of the 'memories' of inanimate objects.  
 
Really enjoyed. 
 
All the best, Phil.

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