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The discovery of London
By Fledermaus
15 December 2006
A silly bit of science fiction...

Note: I heard that the genes responsible for blue eyes and ginger hair are recessive...

Professor Zhang stroked his beard as he looked at the sandy pit. This was certainly the discovery of the century. At last they had found it.
" Do you think what I am thinking?", he asked professor Kahn.
The dark man nodded.
" This could very well be the mythical city. Come, let me show you what we have found so far. There are some extraordinary things."
Kahn guided Zhang to a small building a little aside from the site and showed him in.
He pointed at a piece of coloured glass.
" You know what I think that is?"
" The window of some temple?"
" Not just some temple. I think it's a part of Westminster Abbey!"
" You're kidding me?"
" No realy. This is the window that the great Churchill must have looked through when the German fleet appeared in the skies."
Zhang leant forward and opened his mouth.
" This is... Fascinating... Do you realy think that..."
" 87% sure. We have found some other splinters, but they're still busy putting them together. But let me show you what else we've got."
He walked to a table where numerous pieces of dirty and rusty metal were scattered.
" This, dear collegue, is the railing of either the Millenium Bridge or the Tower Bridge."
Zhang tapped one of the bars.
" Let's not jump to conclusions. Where did you find these?"
" At the bank of the river. They were probably washed away by the great flood of 2253, which destroyed the city. Our experts are 76% certain these were part of a bridge and they date them somewhere between 1700 and 2100."
" It would be realy exciting if they were indeed from one of those bridges."

"But now..."
Kahn smiled mysteriously.
" Now the highlight of this show. Follow me."
They went to a dimly lit room. At one of the large tables there was something that was covered by a white sheet. Kahn turned on the light and pressed a finger against his lips.
" Lo and behold."

He pulled the cloth off the table and revealed the remains of a statue. Stone arms and legs were arranged around a torso. The head was damaged and the feet were missing, but still Zhang could make out that it represented a 19th century warlord.
" Well?"
" Splendid."
" But what do you think this is?"
" A statue of some general."
" Not just some general, my dear Zhang, not just some general. This, dear collegue is Admiral Nelson!"
" You mean the Nelson of Trafalgar?"
" That's him."
" No?"
" Amazing."

Zhang studied the remains carefully and touched them.
" Is this the statue of the collumn?"
" We think so. And you know what? We think it used to be painted in all kinds of strange colours, a red uniform, auburn hair, blue eyes. We are trying to reconstruct it."

Zhang frowned.
" That's nonsense. Do you realy believe such stories? You shouldn't confuse myth with history my dear Khan."
" But they used to paint their statues, didn't they?"
" Oh, no doubt about that. I won't be surprised if the statue on Nelson's collumn was brightly coloured, but I mean yellow hair and blue eyes. Do you realy believe that anyone could have had auburn hair and blue eyes? That's just a poetic way to say healthy hair and sparkling eyes. Give him black hair and brown eyes. He wasn't some sort of mythical creature."
" Perhaps you're right."
" Of course I am! Blue eyes... What a funny idea."

Reviews
How better....
Written by SammoR (111 comments posted) 15th December 2006
 
 
...to teach the concept of ethnocentricity, than through a story like this? 
 
It succeeds where any number of well-meaning courses would fail. 
 
I like the brilliant non-sequitur of Tower Bridge and the Millenium Bridge being treated as from the same era.

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 15th December 2006
Interesting idea. I enjoyed it. 
 
All the best, Phil.
Hi Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 15th December 2006
I thought it was a very entertaining story. I hope that by 2253 they have better scientific equipment and could tell the difference between something from 1700 and 2100. But of course the city was destroyed - but apparently not the world - as they must have had access to books to know about Churchill and Nelson. So don't you think they might have had genetics books too? In lots of countries blue eyes are so universal that someone with brown eyes is looked at with great interest.
thought provoking
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 16th December 2006
neat little piece of writing.  
 
all the best
Great Idea
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 16th December 2006
... loved the exposition and the idea that the assumptions we make based on our own understanding of culture can make history wrong. 
 
Critically I would say this could be made even better by working your dialogue, possibly; 
 
"Do you think what I am thinking?" 
 
Professor Kahn nodded. 
 
That sort of thing makes it flow better for my mind, but is just an opinion. Enjoyed this.

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 17th December 2006
Thanks everyone. 
Who knows what people will make of todays civilization? Appearantly some ancient people looked very different from any human being living today (they found skulls which were deliberately deformed. Not genetic, but still hard to imagine what they looked like when they were alive). And the further back something was created, the more inacurate the archeologists get... Could be 7000 years ago, could be 5000 years ago... As if 2000 years is nothing ;) 
I guess that genetic books were lost after 2253, for appearantly my characters only know some great legendary leaders... The Hectors and Achilleses of our day :D 
 
Thank you all for your comments and your advice.

Written by Thatllbemethen (83 comments posted) 20th December 2006
Not massive about sci-fi myself but liked this a lot. 
 
I find it a bit haunting the cold way forensic scientists go about their business (percentages etc) and agree with your idea that assumptions are arrogantly made. I usually find that the more intelligent a person is the less criticism they accept and the more theories they dictate at the stroke of a pen. 
 
Long live the blue eyed ginger brigade. 
 
Otherwise who else will we pick on?  
 

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 23rd December 2006
Thanks Thatllbemethen, 
It's also funny to see that when archeologists are confused they often claim that something is 'religious'. I remember that a cultural-antropologist once pointed out to an archeologist that a certain 'religious object' was in fact a spoon of a type quite common in Africa :grin

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