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Poetry
Ink
By gutterkitty
15 December 2006
A tad experimental, but mostly the usual kitty fare.

You write me letters with blue ink.
I like to think it captures one kaleidescopic pinprick of your eye.
Though your eyes are green-brown-yellow,
According to the light.

The words I finger fit much better
In my irises than yours.
Across the miles you send me ink in different shapes. I tip
The paper, watch the blue trickle onto my palm,
Hold my breath. Maybe a heart, an ace of spades,
Or some shape that looks different
According to the light.

I imagine I am drunk on ink,
That it makes my eyes bluer,
That my fingers are stained with your sentences.
Perhaps my face will grow lines,
Become as white as letters. And when we meet,
Awkwardly, 
My tongue will be stained (blue
                                           in the
                                      pout lines of 
                                           my lips).

And on the nights when I curl myself into bed,
All salt tears and denial,
My palms will be inked,
Slick,
Soaked with your words. 

Reviews
Mix
Written by patterjack (1194 comments posted) 15th December 2006
part metaphysical - part e.e cummings -- all GK 
 
patterjack

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 15th December 2006
I really really like this GK, I don't think I can explain why exactly but it did have an effect on me. Some beautiful imagery. 
 
Best wishes 
 
E :)

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 15th December 2006
Following patterjack - part Dali. 
 
I enjoyed this GK. The images worked very well for me. 
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 15th December 2006
I liked this as well.. I like the imagery and all. 
 
just a teeny tad typo.. I think.... - "Accross the miles you " it should be "aross"...? :grin  
 
but the poem's good.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 16th December 2006
No dissent from me, very much you and I liked it. 
 
Elli

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 16th December 2006
Sorry - that makes no sense - I meant to say, very much identifiably your style...and I liked it! 
 
Elli

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 17th December 2006
Thanks for your comments everyone, I'm happy you enjoyed it :) Thanks for pointing out the typo rilLie, and don't worry Elli, I understood what you meant!

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