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Poetry
Vagabond
By IronMaiden
17 December 2006

suitcase at your feet, splayed
before you.
At my door you rock a nightingale to sleep,
thumb and finger
stroking the neck

Vagabond.
take off your hat, show me your eyes
are they old or young, blue or black.

before you desert spreads.
thirsty Sahara, fire…
the nightingale tries a song,
but your fingers press tighter.

Vagabond
take off your cloak, I’m getting coldin an empty bed.

feathers scattered where you rest
your fair head, gloved fingers stroke
tighten
choke its song.

Vagabond
I can feel your hands

Vagabond
Remove the shackles and let there be song.

The ash has fallen,
Your reflection obscure, behind a gilded frame.
A face smeared, painted
in watercolour to disguise your tears.

Vagabond
let the nightingale sing, drown
out my crying.

Feathers burn a bitter smell,
Sun is setting, night
is rising, and still you caress.

Vagabond,
empty your suitcase,

come to bed
when only ashes
remain

and the nightingale is dead.


Reviews

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 17th December 2006
Blimey - certainly depressing. Not sure I understood all of it but perversely I liked the sound of it anyway. Interesting piece. 
 
Elli

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 17th December 2006
I liked this. I have to agree with Elli that I didn't understand it fully, but it still had me captivated. 
 
Good stuff! 
 
E:)

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 17th December 2006
I liked this, despite one or two reservations. Boring point: the punctuation was a little unconventional. Thinking point: like the reviewers above, I didn't fully follow this. It could be entirely my fault, but three from three suggests you need to be a little clearer, unless mystery is part of the desired effect. 
 
Having said all that, there's something very beguiling about this. 
 
Phil.

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