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Master of your Art
By IronMaiden
18 December 2006


Captivated by your every movement,
Entranced by your expert dance.
Were you born with the graceful stance, boy
For you're a master of your art

Exerting power with every stride,
with every maneouvre of your shoulders,
every twist, every lunge and every cut,
every glimmer of your sword -
Can I even credit you with what I write?

I wonder how your heart beats
when your breath quickens so.
Do you feel your pulse in the cold steel?
Do your eyes reflect the blade, boy -
does its essence course through your blood
when your cheeks colour and heat?

Your hands hold the weight of life and death:
the weapon, your religion; the dance, your prayer.

Where does such glory come from?
The silver metal from edge to tip,
Your own soul, from heart to mind.
Yet what are you but one of us,
made divine by the life of my words.

Reviews

Written by MissManda (13 comments posted) 18th December 2006
For some reason your poem reminds me of my boyfriend... I love it. ;)

Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 18th December 2006
The first four verses create a very effective visual and tactile picture. 
 
I find the last verse a little dismissive. Perhaps it's supposed to be. Why build him up to knock him down?  
 
(This is where I find I've completely misread the poem and look like a complete idiot.) 
 
Phil.

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