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Poetry
Given the Gallows
By MissManda
18 December 2006
Poetry isn't just the written word. Half of the meaning is lost if it isn't also the spoken word.

And you sang standing sideways, crossing your eyes
People-peeping, you pointed past the two paths
Where the willows weep and widows keep away

There the trees talk, telling terrible tales
Bellowing out boasts before their brothers
Listening less for lest living is not best

Didn’t you die despite their decaying words?
Having viciously veered into the living
Never knowing how with nothing to know now

Forging together our old flights of fancy
I caressed your cadaver in keeping you
Hung high along the thoroughfare… sideways

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Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 18th December 2006
Okay - I've not read your poem yet, but I'm with you 100% on the intro. 
 
Things to like in this. Content, very interesting. As an exercise in using alliteration, fine, but I think this went a little far. Some alliteration adds to the vocal delivery of a piece, this much takes over. 
 
Phil.

Written by MissManda (13 comments posted) 18th December 2006
Thanks Phil. :) To be honest, I was trying to go a little farther with this than I normally would. I realize you can underdo something and then you can overdo something. Both have the same result. I just thought I'd give it a swing though.. I really love going overboard.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st December 2006
I agree with Phil here - I found the content intriguing but the alliteration over the top. Fine as an exercise but the contstant wordplay makes the content harder to access. That said, for me it reads aloud beautifully. 
 
Elli

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