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Poetry
Merpire
By MissManda
18 December 2006
mermaid
slimy, striking
swimming, singing, staring
water, midnight, midnight, blood
soaring, sipping, sucking
subtle, smile
vampire

Reviews

Written by Clifftown (620 comments posted) 19th December 2006
Really liked the concept of merging mermaids and vampires for some reason! Very interesting - simple but effective.

Written by Thatllbemethen (83 comments posted) 19th December 2006
Creepy. Excellent. 
 
ditto.
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 19th December 2006
creepy, but good!!! 
 
cheers, 
rilLie

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st December 2006
I liked the symmetry in this piece - clever idea although I think you could tweak lines 3 and 5 to make more of the links between words which works so well in 2 and 6. Conceptually very strong and, for me, almost completely clean execution. Like it. 
 
Elli
weird
Written by no1butClo (337 comments posted) 5th March 2007
love it! :)  
 
rhythm would work better if you swapped vampire and smile, although i know that defeats the object of the poem >_< 
 
clo

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