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Monochrome Symphony

By ellipinnock

20 December 2006

You flip through a brown paper envelope

of old snapshots, a staccato slideshow

of black and white images.

A record of my infidelities.

I stop you

to point out grainy,

ambiguous grayscale

but you only see a starkly delineated

procession of bad choices.

In your monochrome symphony

I must be wrong

or sometimes right

but nothing inbetween.

We must make love under twinkling starlight

or lie back-to-back in sullen silence.

There is no space for mad passion

born of anger or regret or anything

apart from love remaining true.

I am constrained by your choice

of rhythm. Syncopation

is frowned upon, to change
time signature, unthinkable

but I will sing in a different

technicolour Disney key,

make my own decisions

with complete irrationality

and never love you less.

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Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 20th December 2006

What an interesting way of contrasting these different personalities. There are people who see things as black and white and cannot accept that there are all kinds of shades of grey in between -- it is either all or nothing. What I like about this poem is that even given the different life philosophy, there is still love.

This is a very thoughtful, well-expressed poem. I love the line 'We must make love under twinkling starlight / or lie back to back in sullen
silence,' but I cannot help but think that the all-or-nothing person will have a nasty shock if s/he ever gets married.

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 21st December 2006

Liked this Elli, an interesting metaphor to explore this idea. I sometimes envy those who see in black and white. Always seeing shades of grey can be a bit of a drag at times.

I liked it all, but there's something about the last verse that really pulls me in.

All the best, Phil.

HI Elli
Written by jean.day (2326 comments posted) 30th December 2006

I like this. You always make me work hard to think of something suitable to say - other than how good your work is.

I think it must be hard to love somebody who sees everything in black and white. I suppose the question is, does the lover love you less for not conforming to his point of view.

Very interesting and thought provoking.

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