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Poetry
Desert Rain
By Witzl
20 December 2006
Not very Christmasy. But it's hot back in Southern California, and I might be getting a little homesick.

DESERT RAIN

 

I used to love those rainy days

Silky grey veils, all torn, the smell of stone

Of earth made wet, the scorched sand dampened

The sagebrush dripping, granite glistening

Sweet relief to a thousand thirsty creatures.

 

For weeks and weeks, the world hard-baked

Under the sun’s relentless, busy flame

The summer ovens stoked forever, tirelessly

by that same sun.

Our feet, our throats, so parched, so dry –

And then it came, that sweet, soft, quiet sound,

a creeping, sizzling, rustling, nuzzling

 

So tentative, like insects shyly fluttering

Like children stealthily devouring fruit

And from the heated earth, a mist arose

As soil received, absorbed the falling water

As quickly over as begun.

 

Never a drenching, never quite enough

The earth, still thirsty, craving more

was left to dry and crack again;

Our feet, our throats that welcomed moistened air

soon coated once again with dust

And in our hearts, deep longing for the rain of rains

A soaking, quenching, cooling, gushing flood.

Reviews

Written by Thatllbemethen (83 comments posted) 20th December 2006
You are clearly an old pro. 
 
Did you rattle this off during all that baking? 
 
Don't usually go for this type of descriptive poem, but perhaps now I do. 
 
Especially liked the last verse. 
 
Congrats on writing a re-reader.
Hi Witzl
Written by jean.day (2327 comments posted) 20th December 2006
Lovely imageary with this. I particularly liked this bit.  
 
And then it came, that sweet, soft, quiet sound, 
 
a creeping, sizzling, rustling, nuzzling 
 
 
 
So tentative, like insects shyly fluttering 
 
Like children stealthily devouring fruit 
 
Do you go back to California very often?  
 

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 21st December 2006
Thank you both so much for your comments and kind words.  
 
Actually, Thatllbemethen (I really need to find out your name pretty soon, or start calling you TBMT), I wrote this between spiced cranberry rum drops and Mexican wedding cookies. I opened up the oven to check on my cookies and got hit by a powerful blast -- and just for the briefest nanosecond I was back in Riverside, my hometown. (Don't feel bad if you've never heard of it; I used to wish I never had.)  
 
No, Jean, I hardly ever get back to California. My parents are long gone, and my sisters still live in California, but it just isn't practical for me to go home frequently. The last time I was back was in 2001, just before we moved to Scotland. I do miss much about home, but a little of Southern California goes a long way, I'm afraid.  
 

Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 21st December 2006
Liked this very much Witzl. Like Jean I especially liked: 
 
And then it came, that sweet, soft, quiet sound,  
 
a creeping, sizzling, rustling, nuzzling  
 
Your descritions were all very effective and put me there in California. (oh for a bit of warm sun just now) 
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 21st December 2006
I loved this. Some beautiful imagery and very evocative of a completely different world. Powerful piece. 
 
Elli

Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 22nd December 2006
I liked this very much Witzl but I guess I’m a pushover on this topic. 
 
… 
I love a sunburnt country, a land of sweeping plains, 
… 
 
I also love descriptive poetry/prose. 
 
Thank you 
 
http://www.theotherpages.org/poems/2000/m/mackel01.html 

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