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| Crossing the reservoir in the dead of night, | |
| By no1butClo | ||||||||||
| 21 December 2006 | ||||||||||
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On the advice of Kitten I'm publishing in the form of my usual duo, but the next will follow shortly. The ol' writing's been a bit slow recently, this is the second draught of a rather shaky work in progress [you're not seeing the first one - don't ask why, just no]. Not sure the biblical stuff works, I may take it out - tell me what you think? Also I'm having this thing with brackets at the moment, and I'm not sure that's helping either. In the words of The Beatles: "Won't you PLEEEEEEAAAAASE ple-ease help me..." PS have a nice Christmas everybody =) [those using 'xmas' will be shot on-site. - just because he couldn't sign his name, doesn't mean that baby wasn't important!] Crossing the reservoir in the dead of night, Looking out over shattered moonshine glinting and brittle, shallow enough to draw the eye to the necrotic mass below. Stagnant, the waters present a freeze- frame. Remnants held in time, rotting. [The third day came and went for them] The causeway marks a dark line, and in its shadow something paler marks itself - no brittle gleam hides this organic shrapnel. A body a face a girl - No Name. [she washed His feet with her tears] She was crossing the reservoir in the dead of night, out too late with the wrong man for too long. Now the surface steals kisses from lips of stone - parted, teasing - but her own hair and the weeds hold her still; her last embrace. Blood snakes from her nose unchecked. [and she did eat] Clenched teeth - perhaps she was cold - will not speak of final pictures, but her clothes cling on to those nights out. [they hid themselves in the garden for they were naked] In her eyes the same brittle glint, same depth which refuses to conceal the necrotic mass below. [ashes, and dust]
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