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Playing Doctors and Nurses |
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By Ladybird
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11 June 2005 |
Playing Doctors and Nurses We're playing Dr's and Nurses My little friend Joey and me. I think it's alright though Cos I'm TWENTY ONE and JOEY? Well, he's TWENTY-THREE!! |
Good fun...
Written by richard (88 comments posted) 12th June 2005 | I liked this idea - and I'm not sure whether you intended it, but as it started off, I got the sense of a nursery rhyme, in the rhythm of the first line. Only problem I had was that I couldn't find a way to read it to keep a rhythm going all the way through the piece (this may well just be me though.)
Richard
| doctors and nurses
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 12th June 2005 | | yeah, good one this | heinz beans ad
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 13th June 2005 | it's nice
send it in to whoever does their ads , quiiiiiiiiiick | Playing Drs and Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 14th June 2005 | Thank you Richard- Maipenrai and kevinrobinson73.
For your kind words.
I thought I had the punctuation right for the Rhythm
Richard but open to suggestions.
Ladybird | Love It
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 20th June 2005 | | Love this poem, very funny and I think the rhythm is perfect - would make a great performance poem | Playing Drs and Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 20th June 2005 | Thank you Sara for your comments.
Ladybird | Great fun and kinda sexy
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 24th August 2006 | I have to confess that this one put a lascivious leer on my aged vizog. I'm so old (40) I can't remember what the rules of Dr's & nurses were. Can I play the patient in the game??? Go on, don't be selfish - what use is a medical practice without patients? I suspect we may have to establish a waiting room!
Oli | Drs & Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 26th August 2006 | Thank you Talisker for your comments - looks like it hit the spot with you!
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Your own poems are very thought provoking and deep.
You have obvioulsy been to many dark places in your mind but it has only enhanced your talent for writing poetry.Well done.
Pleased that you enjoyed my lighthearted nonsense.
Ladybird |
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