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Playing Doctors and Nurses
By Ladybird
11 June 2005

Playing Doctors and Nurses

We're playing Dr's and Nurses

My little friend Joey and me.

I think it's alright though

Cos I'm TWENTY ONE

and JOEY?

Well, he's TWENTY-THREE!!

Reviews
Good fun...
Written by richard (88 comments posted) 12th June 2005
I liked this idea - and I'm not sure whether you intended it, but as it started off, I got the sense of a nursery rhyme, in the rhythm of the first line. Only problem I had was that I couldn't find a way to read it to keep a rhythm going all the way through the piece (this may well just be me though.) 
 
Richard 
 
doctors and nurses
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 12th June 2005
yeah, good one this
heinz beans ad
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 13th June 2005
it's nice 
send it in to whoever does their ads , quiiiiiiiiiick
Playing Drs and Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 14th June 2005
Thank you Richard- Maipenrai and kevinrobinson73. 
For your kind words. 
I thought I had the punctuation right for the Rhythm 
Richard but open to suggestions. 
Ladybird
Love It
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 20th June 2005
Love this poem, very funny and I think the rhythm is perfect - would make a great performance poem
Playing Drs and Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 20th June 2005
Thank you Sara for your comments. 
Ladybird
Great fun and kinda sexy
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 24th August 2006
I have to confess that this one put a lascivious leer on my aged vizog. I'm so old (40) I can't remember what the rules of Dr's & nurses were. Can I play the patient in the game??? Go on, don't be selfish - what use is a medical practice without patients? I suspect we may have to establish a waiting room! 
 
Oli
Drs & Nurses
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 26th August 2006
Thank you Talisker for your comments - looks like it hit the spot with you! 

Your own poems are very thought provoking and deep. 
You have obvioulsy been to many dark places in your mind but it has only enhanced your talent for writing poetry.Well done. 
 
Pleased that you enjoyed my lighthearted nonsense. 
Ladybird

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