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Learning to Use Wings

By rilLie

23 December 2006

This poem's for the mudslide victims in Bicol. Really sad.. their families were literally swallowed up by mud. And once again, I'm digging in to my old clothes to donate... can't believe they never run out.

They're learning to use broken wings
no one could ever mend.
They're learning to see new buildings
they could never love.

They're learning to walk with stylish shoes
they never really cared for.
They're learning to get used to city clothes
they'll never be accustomed to.

They're learning to breathe,
They're learning to live,
knowing that their loved ones are lying,
dead beneath their feet.

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Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 23rd December 2006

Even though they're perhaps not used to the sort of clothes you donate, I'm sure they'll be happy to have them, and I think it's a good sign that people do what you do. It's much more than just providing clothes. It shows that they aren't left all alone in this world...

This poem left me silent for quite some time... It's a beautiful poem about such a horrible disaster :cry

Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 23rd December 2006

Moving piece of work. Sent shivers down my spine.

Phil.

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 23rd December 2006

Very effective rilLie, and so sad...powerful last verse.

Best wishes,

E

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 23rd December 2006

thanks.

...

Fledermaus -- yeah, i hope they do feel that way when my favourite shirt reaches them.. (it's too small now!! i got it when I was seven.. :cry

) actually.. i got the idea of the stylish shoes when our religion teacher shared that once, when he went somewhere to help survivors of a typhoon, he found that some three-inch high heels were donated the Ita's... I mean... come on! :grin

Phil -- my mum said the same... told me to write something jolly for christmas..

Esra -- i love the last verse best, actually. :grin

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 28th December 2006

Yes, very moving rilLie, for what it's worth I think you could lose 'they're' in a lot of places. For me the first two verses were the strongest but that's neither here nor there. Liked it.

Elli

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 28th December 2006

thanks.

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