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Poetry
London Eyes
By gutterkitty
25 December 2006
I see London in your eyes.
And the pigeons that you hate,
lining your eyebrows.

You smell of smoky skylines,
asian spices,
marijuana. Your lips curve
like the Thames.

I see buildings
reflected in your eyes. Black window
panes pattern the iris.

You walk like London bridge,
and build the Tower every day
with every word, like bricks.



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wow
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 27th February 2007
This is wicked writing gk, not much I can think of to improve it! Only in the first stanza 'lining your eyebrows' - perhaps change the word 'lining' or the line itself, but it seems a little clumsy 
 
otherwise, a lovely little poem - 'Your lips/curve like teh Thames' - love it! 
 
clo x

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