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Poetry
Midnight Magic
By Bagheera
26 December 2006
There are legends - more than one, I'm certain of it! - about animals acquiring the power of speech on Christmas Night. Here with my thoughts inspired by these folk tales. The last line of the final verse refused to follow the same pattern as the others, so I let the poem have its own way ...........

Midnight Magic


With the first of midnight’s strokes

The ox to his stablemate ass spoke:

“My friend! Why must you look so glum?

He whose Cross adorns your back is come!

Rejoice with me!”

 

As the second peal of the bell was heard

Up on the rafters of the stable, a bird

Preened his red breast and trilled his song:

“Praise our God for whom we have waited long!

Rejoice with us!”

 

Chimes three, four and five rang true and clear

Three shepherds, each bearing a lamb, draw near

Each lamb bleats softly, three as one:

“All hail to the Virgin’s Child, God’s Son

Rejoice, everyone!”

Peals six and seven shimmer and fade away

The magic midnight hour cannot be stayed

Two tiny moths around a candle weave their dance

The Child’s eyes follow them, entranced:

“Rejoice! Rejoice, and dance!”

 

Eight, nine, ten: the bell seems to toll faster

A dog, a cat, a mouse gaze at their Master

Enemies of old, perchance, but not tonight

As they adore the Baby, mild and bright:

“Rejoice! The Saviour is here!”

 

Eleven, twelve: the night’s toll dies away

Soon, with the dawning of a brand new day

Each animal’s gift to understand another

Must lie a further twelvemonth, undiscovered

Until the Christmas magic works its spell

Reviews

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 27th December 2006
Quite liked this Bagheera. I don't think it matters the last line doesn't follow the pattern. 
 
Phil.
Hi Bagheera
Written by jean.day (2366 comments posted) 27th December 2006
This was beautiful. I read it several times and enjoyed it more on each occasion. I liked the idea of unusual animals getting involved - like the moths. 
 
I liked the line - he whose cross adorns your back has come. I wasn't sure if there was a cross pattern on the donkey's hide - or whether it was an allusion to the events of Holy Week to come.  
 
How are your books getting on?

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 28th December 2006
Liked this although I wasn't sure about the last lines in each stanza. A lovely gentle Christmas piece. Like Jean, I really liked, 'He whose Cross adorns your back has come' - a beautiful line. Very festive :) 
 
Elli

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 28th February 2007
I was impressed with the sophistication of this poem. I too had heard of that myth and have written on a similar theme. I think that it was beautifully crafted and I like the repetition of form of each stanza. The ending worked fine for me. 
Thanks 
Kathy

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