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Poetry
Toothless
By rilLie
26 December 2006
sadly, autobiographical... bad memories... the last stanza's crap though.... not true..


Once before when I was six
I remember tripping on the stairs
It hurt very much, I really cried
a mass of flesh, of tears was I.

I tasted blood gush out my mouth
my right front tooth was gone now.
I wailed and sobbed my tooth goodbye,
seeing my reflection, the more I cried.

My mum was furious when she saw,
a terrible monster with large claws,
She made me glue the tooth back
and was terribly impatient, "Cut the slack!"

I sadly grinned for two hours long,
as my mum ranted on and on.
As I waited for the glue to dry,
in front of the mirror, my oh my!

And here, a lesson I have learned,
and I do believe I've rathered earned,
never, ever will I again,
go down the stairs, eating chicken!!!

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 27th December 2006
Didn't know you could glue teeth back on rilLie. 
 
Phil.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 27th December 2006
half of my tooth, actually.....

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 28th December 2006
Interesting idea rilLie. For me the rhyme was forced in places and it reads awkwardly at times but potentially a nice quirky piece. 
 
Elli

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 28th December 2006
yeah, don't worry, I think the same. :grin Did this a long time ago.. I was just too lazy to post it.. :x anyway.......... thanks!

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 29th December 2006
In agreement with above RiLie. The concept of the poem was good (and I too knocked out a front tooth at the age of 11), but I know that you have moved on quite a bit with your writing. I think you could re-do this poem in a much smoother way today.

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