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Sand Castles
By rilLie
30 December 2006
ok.. another weather thing.. we don't have winter here.. so I do feel a bit touchy about the subject. XP

Over a week has past
and you've forgotten
all about me
like sandcastles are lost
when fall and winter come.

Over a week has past
and I still spend my time
crying,
like sandcastles spend theirs
collapsing.

But sandcastles are lucky
and I want to be one
Because after the spring
comes cummer
and then,
they are carressed and
formed by loving hands,
once more.

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Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 30th December 2006
Sorry rilLie, not up to the high quality you've posted of late. Just goes to show how much you've come on. 
Liked the last image. 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 30th December 2006
With Phil on this one, quite a nice idea but maybe lost somewhat in the execution. Has potential though if you want to work on it. 
 
Elli

Written by rilLie (328 comments posted) 30th December 2006
thanks! I'll work on it. :grin  
 
but I do think I'm coming down with a cold... maybe later. :x :grin  
 
rilLie

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