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After Visiting Liverpool
Written by fellpony
30 December 2006
More than an awareness of light pollution ... written a lot of years ago, but perhaps even more relevant now.

Until I passed an alley, where the night
Ought to have lain with secrecy entranced,
I’d never turned my eyes up from the street
That ran around me like a box, nor glanced
Up at the inside of its grey box lid.

I stopped a moment, for its beauty seemed
Calm and urbane at rest there on the roofs;
Palest of turquoise, shot with orange where
The dockside street lights blazed; yet, unredeemed
By moon or star’s uncivilised reproofs,
Merely a flat sky, blindly sleeping there.

Returning home a hundred miles, I stood
Under a sky of velvet black that swept
The circling horizon like a cloak,
And the cold stars with silent laughter stirred
My soul from its long torpor of neglect.
Somewhere within me wonder re-awoke.

I thought of days of summer, when the sun
Beats on these high hard hills, so close
That one could reach and touch him; and of chill
Autumn’s open vistas, when the sun
That rose applecheeked sets in blood behind the hill.

Then night is total, and the village lights
Are of small comfort.  Night here is not tame;
The stars are not dulled, and the moon not mild;
Here the dark arches overall, and flights
Of arrowing stars shine coldly.  When I came
Home, I exulted that my skies were wild.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 1st January 2007
Liked this a lot. I've lived in big towns and cities all my life but hiked and camped a lot too. One of the pleasures of camping rough is to look up on a clear night and see the countless stars above. Always fills me with awe. 
 
Phil

Written by CarlHalling (34 comments posted) 6th March 2007
I liked this poem very much; there's not a word out of place; it's very carefully thought out, and has a strong aesthetic appeal, with some very striking and unusual imagery. Yes, very good.
Oh, wow!
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 22nd November 2007
......... and one of the best arguments FOR the 'random listing' feature on GW .... somehow I missed this first time around! 
 
Beautifully expressed, it had me remembering nights at a [small] Scout campsite somewhere or other in Essex (not one of the big Scout camps such as Gilwell Park, this was a much smaller LOCAL campsite). 
What was most in evidence was the total ABSENCE of the "light pollution" we never even thought about in central London (where I lived at the time). 
 
Fortunately I escaped from Stalag Luft London ......... Liverpool is an improvement on THAT, but everything's relative and yes, the town throughly deserves fellpony's remarks :sigh

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