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| UNTITLED - CHAPTER 2 | |
| By Storywriter1987 | ||||||||||
| 31 December 2006 | ||||||||||
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Here is the second chapter. Again i feel its a bit below my usual standard but your review are always welcome. “But he can’t have been. You would have told me who he was.” “I should have done but he was there.” “So who was he? Which one?” All I could do was stare at him. I just stared at him. It took a few moments to register and then it clicked in. He was Alice’s father. “But how could I be her father. She’s… she’s…” “Yours. Before you went away, the work trip to America, we had a night in together. I found out I was pregnant a few weeks later. I know I should have told you. I am not going to spin you a line about keeping you out the picture. I was stupid, young and in love. When I had her I was only focusing on her. She was all that mattered to me at the time. She was mine, my daughter. She was part of me. She’s part of us! Josh, she’s our daughter. And I want us to be a family. Together, just the way a family is meant to be. But I completely understand if you want to leave now and never come back but think about somethings, Alice is your daughter, our daughter. We’ve been together for 11 years. And I love you.” That was it. Speech over, bed time. He was always a man that thought things over thoroughly before making a decision. I went up the stairs, checked on Alice and then got ready for bed. Lying there alone felt bad. I’d never felt so alone in all the time I remember. Even when he was in America, Josh called everyday and he wrote every week. The owl’s started hooting just outside the window and I was in a world of my own. A world where it was me and Alice alone and we weren’t happy. She loved Josh as though he was her Daddy, the fact that he was her dad had nothing to do with it, and she didn’t know that. In this world everything was back to front. Upside down and Topsy turvy and muddled up. I was brought out of my funny little world by the bed giving way beneath me. I turned and saw him there, he’d obviously been crying and I felt bad because I had never seen him cry before. He pulled me into his arms and laid my head on his shoulder. Comforting yet strangely it felt wrong. He should be out that door faster than a whippet with a bum full of dynamite. But here he was, holding me in his arms. Stroking my hair and kissing me softly. “Josh. You’re meant to be gone. After what I’ve just told you, I would have expected you to be off flirting and bonking the next thing in a mini skirt, like most men would. But instead, your not there. You’re here. Why? I don’t understand.” “I am here because I love you. I love you and Alice. The fact that she’s mine, ours is not relevant as I loved her before I knew that. She’s gorgeous, intelligent, and I love her. You’re the only one for me and you always will be. You’re the love of y life Catlin and I’m not about to let you go. I’m here because I’m not like most men I am your man, now and forever……….. Catlin……” He turned, got something out the bedside table’s top drawer and faced me again. His hands held mine and my tears were mixing with his. “Catlin, 11 years I’ve wasted and all that time we were away from each other - i hated myself for kissing her but i was a bit drunk and i didn't know what i was doing. I swear I never meant to hurt you. Those 6 months when you wouldn't talk to me, wouldn't even go to a party unless I was there. I hated them. I'd walk into a room and you would turn round and walk straight back out again. 11 years in total! 11 Years i've wasted. Just loving you, and I want to be able to love you forever and a day and have you with my always. Tell people you’re mine. I want to go to bed at night holding you and wake up each morning with you in my arms. I wasn’t to see Alice grow. I want to be there for her through all the troubled times that lie ahead of her. I want us to grow old together. Catlin, my darling Catlin. Will you marry me?”
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