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Paper Wings

By rilLie

02 January 2007

wrote this on the way from our house to Quezon city -- two and a half hours.... I had to write something......

If we were all airplanes,
I'd be the one
with the paper wings
and your reckless acts
may well be the scissors
that cut them and injure me,
never caring if I fall.

But the good thing is,
that eventually you'll regret
hurting my wings,
and then you would become
the scotch tape
that binds me back together
again.

And then I wouldn't care
that I'm just made of paper,
because I know
that even if I'm vulnerable
to all things
including you,
you would be there,
to fix me once more,
my very own scotch tape.

Reviews

Written by IronMaiden (9 comments posted) 1st January 2007

very interesting. i really like this poem. It's very realistic and you're metaphors are effective.

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 2nd January 2007

I liked this also, nice idea with the paper and scotch tape.

E

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 2nd January 2007

Something quite fresh about this, liked the idea, not sure about the sentiment though.

Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 2nd January 2007

I really like the metaphor you've got here but I'm not sure the piece quite works as a whole - maybe needs more thought. It is a good idea but I think you need to give it more than the obvious if you get what I mean.

Elli

Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 2nd January 2007

Goodness me! Your pen or computer keyboard never stops! You really have got the buzz for poetry writing RiLie, and I can see that with all this practice you are getting better and better. I agree with Phil, though, and I am not sure about the sentiment. I hope you don't really feel as if you are all broken and need sticking back together.

Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 3rd January 2007

thanks.

I wrote this during a trip to Manila and I couldn't really read what I was writing coz the road was too bumpy...

anyway...... It's the first day of classes and I'm really really saaadd........ for some reason, I can't get over it... :cry

thanks, though. :grin

((bloody moodswings...))

rilLie

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