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Poetry
Haloes
By gutterkitty
03 January 2007
What was your New Year's Eve like?

The fireworks shatter
into stars above our heads,
and we lean back to catch the sight.

The sky reels closer, like so many shouts.
The smell of beer and cigarettes. It's cold
so I pull your coat tighter round me,
hold your waist. 
                      
                      The clouds swim over the moon 
as the world looks up to watch the year fade away,
to be replaced. The earth is shedding its skin
(or at least, in our heads).

But I'm not thinking of so many faces, tilting
towards the sky, or the year fading into the black;
the night's too close for reminiscing. No-

I'm concious only of the warmth
of your shirt, beneath my fingers
and the fire bursting into haloes above our heads.

Reviews
well done
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 3rd January 2007
neat and not mawky -- good work 
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 3rd January 2007
Heart warming piece. It flicks from the large and consuming to the small but important details really well. The warmth of the body through the shirt - lovely touch. 
 
Phil.

Written by JourneyAtNight (318 comments posted) 3rd January 2007
Lovely piece. I loved the last stanza, and also the idea of clouds swimming over the moon. 
Good stuff - emotive, but not at all in a mushy way. 
E

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 4th January 2007
Nothing more to add to the above. I liked this a lot. 
 
Elli

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 5th January 2007
Fab. Something genuine and heartfelt here. 
 
Distilled emotion. What poetry should be. 
 
Oli :) :)

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 6th January 2007
thanks everyone! Really glad you enjoyed it :)  
 
Phil- thanks for your interpretation. I didn't think of it that way, but you've got it down to a t.  
 
Oli- thank you for such high praise! I will try to live up to it in future.

Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 10th January 2007
great piece. I liked the structure, each verse like a puzzle piece, fitting each other without bending the ends! 
 
I enjoy reading your work very much 
well done 
 
Fran

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 10th January 2007
Thanks Fran :) that's really sweet, I can say likewise! I liked your description of the stanzas as puzzle pieces too.

Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 6th April 2007
So easy to empathise with, but the little images catch you and make you notice it more...loved that sentence on it's own 'The smell of beer and cigarettes.'... 
 
gorgeous, well done 
 
clo

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