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Lucubratum / The passing of time
Written by fellpony
06 January 2007
(revised)

Strangely, this was a poem I wrote when I was 19. It arrived almost fully formed, the first time I had ever had that happen, and it was scarey. For a long time it was called "Sine Nomine" but I thought that was a bit of a cop-out.  Lucubratum means "studied by candlelight".

The theme of the passing of time (burning candle, daylight growing and waning, the year turning) still gets to me. Stanza 5 carries even more of a shiver now than it did 30-something years ago.



I crept all alone through the night by the light of a star,
Half saw in the dark all the things that are frightening in dreams,
Stumbled on rocks, into briars, and out of eternity;
My hand found the candle. I lit it and held it aloft.

    Where am I going, so strangely perplexed?
    How does the world run, by logic or lust?
    Why am I travelling, windblown and lost?
    How shall I see if the candle blows out?

So I followed the star to a hilltop and waited for dawn.
I was dazzled by brilliant sunshine and deep glowing sky,
My tentative  footesteps a maze, quickly lost in the grass,
Where the spring of the year danced around me and beckoned me on.

    Sometimes I stood there to listen and look
    When I stopped travelling; looked at the world
    Displayed in the sunlight, familiar or strange;
    The candle unheeded still burned in my hand.

I wandered knee deep among daisies and sunshine and joy,
And then summer was over, and whispering autumn descended
On flat empty lands, and bitter cold winds blowing easterly,
Clouds in the darkening sky, and no warmth, and no star.

    Where should I go now, so strangely perplexed?
    Why am I travelling, windblown and lost?
    Winter is shaking the guttering flame;
    What shall I see when the candle blows out?

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First impression...
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 6th January 2007
I like this very much, it touched something...I've read it a couple of times and I think I'm going to come back tomorrow and think about it some more and maybe say something more constructive! 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 6th January 2007
I've come back to this a couple of times. While I may have reputation as a bit of a dunce with poetry on occasion, understanding isn't really the problem here - I just can't connect. The final verse did something, but that was all. 
 
I don't think you need to worry too much about that. I can see there's quality here - just not for me. I guess it's a little like opera - I know it's marvellous - I've been told. I can see the skill and art, but it doesn't move me. (Give me swing any day of the week.) 
 
I hope this ramble makes sense. 
 
Phil

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 9th January 2007
This piece intrigues me - I've come back several times. This deals with a theme and images that are, if not cliched, then certainly well-travelled. However, it is very resonant for me, the last two stanzas in particular. I like it very much. 
 
Elli

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