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On a Trainer
Written by fellpony
06 January 2007
You've all seen them ... the lost bit of footwear on a roadside. Michael Flanders' "single, laceless, left-hand leather boot", or in my case, a trainer.

I composed a lot of this one evening on the way home from a meeting in Preston. Just a bit of rhyming fun.

Alone upon the motorway

A single trainer sat

Like a horse without a rider

Or a ball without a bat;

I wondered how a trainer

Came to be lying there

Husbandless or wifeless,

Just one, that was a pair?

Was it dropped out of a window?

Was it thrown with sudden hate

At an overtaking trailer

On a forced decelerate?

Did it make a bid for freedom,

And wriggle through a snag

Developed as it travelled

In a strapped-on carrier bag?

Did it callously abandon

A hitch-hiker on the hop?

Or was it just forgotten

In a quick unscheduled stop?



And what’s the other doing,

That shod the other foot?

Is it reaching from a roof-rack,

Or delving in a boot

To find its missing partner?

Is it overcome with joy?

Or perhaps it simply envies

This one’s power to annoy?

Is it lost, bereft and widowed?

Will it it weep from each lace hole,

Or seek another trainer

To accompany its sole?


Reviews

Written by Josie (2846 comments posted) 7th January 2007
This is quite a funny subject. Although I find it funny, I think you could have improved the look of your poem by dividing it into four line stanzas, single spacing, with an indent for the rhyming line. It would look so much better. Good try, with good rhyme and rhythm.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 7th January 2007
Good light-hearted piece, enjoyed it. I always think there's something a bit sinister about a single shoe sitting by the roadside - probably says more about me than anything else. 
 
Phil.

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 7th January 2007
There are one-legged people you know!  
 
Yes it is a strange phenomena though. A nice fun poem. 
 
Oli :grin

Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 7th January 2007
OK, being a trainer (i.e. one who trains others) I was wide-mouthed with horror until about line eight, when the penny suddenly dropped. 
 
I have had similar thoughts about socks. I also lost a motorcycle glove once, and had to ride home semi-clad handed. I too wonder how the demi-shod victim then gets home. 
 
Loved the thought of irate motorists throwing shoes at lorry drivers, and admired the decelerate rhyme. 
 
Made me smile.

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