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A Single Red Rose
By tat_2man
07 January 2007
Just something I wrote pretty quickly. Undecided

‘I wrote you this letter but I guess it’s better if I just read it to you’ I began.

 

‘Our time together was the happiest in my life except there at the end. It’s time I moved on now. And I hope you can forgive me for any pain I have caused you.’ I whispered to her.

 

I slowly looked around as I wiped a tear from my cheek, the sun was bright and the sky was clear and a slight breeze rustled the leaves on the trees.

 

‘I just have to let you go and move on but it’s not that easy. You have been a part of my life for five years now and it is hard to just say goodbye.’

 

In the distance I could hear traffic and the sounds of children playing.

 

‘I feel like life has passed me by and I need to catch up to it.  And I can not do that when all I want is to be with you. You will always be my love and I hope when you see me you will be happy about how I have moved on. I love you’

 

I laid the note and a single red rose on her headstone and walked slowly away.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 7th January 2007
Good bit of 'flash.' Effectively written. I guess some will say this is too short. Just right for me. 
 
(Check punctuation, one or two marks left out.) 
 
Phil.

Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 7th January 2007
I agree with Phil on this one. Short, but very sweet and heart touching. 
 
Loved it. :)

Written by tat_2man (56 comments posted) 7th January 2007
Thanks Phil and LynB. I seem to write short short stories better than I write anything else. :grin

Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 7th January 2007
You're welcome - I'm just the opposite! My latest offering is up to chapter 28 and counting.... :grin

Written by Snodlander (501 comments posted) 7th January 2007
Damn! I post The Date, then I see this. I wasn't copying, honest.  
 
I find it very hard to write a short short story. I think to post something as short as this shows confidence. Mine ramble on as I try to impress with my cleverness. Sometimes I wish I could write a piece as short as this. 
 
Hmmm. Maybe you have just inspired me...

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3369 comments posted) 7th January 2007
A nicely judged piece. I think it needed to be short as you were clearly leading to some sort of twist or surprise end and you took about the right time to get there. I know these little vignettes are tricky to get write and I can only applaud your effort, no real criticism to add 
cheers 
J

Written by tat_2man (56 comments posted) 7th January 2007
Thank you all for your kind comments. :)

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