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Freud retreats from self analysis |
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By patterjack
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08 January 2007 |
Freud retreats from self analysis.
I wait here where I have so often sat,
pen poised and notebook at the ready.
The green chair fits my body's weary contours
just as the covered couch lets you relax .
Qashqa'i shekarlu , from the lion weaving tribe,
the rug upon it droops down to the floor.
Your arm hangs listless following its curve .
That rug has carried many lion dreams
as the women wove and wove its ancient pattern
and now it takes into its coloured brightness
the revelations that your dreams give me.
Sometimes, I also muse on what it tells of me --
Why , I sometimes ask , did I choose that pattern ?
Do I see myself as a lion , fiercely bearded
and waiting to pounce on the patient's running dream ?
What dreams of my own shall I let , uncaged ,
run with loping lion strides across the plain ,
thighs driving through the infinite distances
that stretch to horizons both behind him and before ?
Stop !
It is your dreams , deep and tightly woven
that I must think upon. Show me enough of them
that I will be able to provide you with release .
Not now the time to unravel the warp and weft
of the patterned cloth that wraps around my core .
I fear the echo of the tawny lion's roar. |
Top notch! Written by Talisker (1321 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | Excellent stuff Brian - I wonder what inspired this? A picture? Like your Freud, I am in introspective mode in these wee small days of 2007. I had to look up the Persian rug reference, no such finery hereabouts! Love the way you "wove" the rug and the lion metaphor into your poem. The image of the lion running is particularly vivid for me. Wonderful! Oli | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | This really is a fine poem, and one that I wanted -- and had to -- read several times. I like the idea of Freud wondering why he chose the particular pattern of rug in his office. And speculating about his own dreams -- only to manage to check himself before he learns, or gives away, too much. | thank you both Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | Not sure where it came from Oli , but it's likely that a radio show called All In The Mind on our ABC was seminal . That and a joke shared with another correspondent about Freudian slips and Sigmund's leather couch. When I researched to find something about the couch I saw the Qashqa'i shekarlu rug and the lions seemed to take over . It took some effort to get back to Sigmund . Floating in the background in my skull were works by Hoban , Yeats , and Ted Hughes , but there are no direct relationships. Again , thank you both , and also the couch inspiring correspondent ! patterjack | Written by fellpony (1576 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | Excellent! Interesting to read how the seed was sown. On another tack entirely (and without offending, I hope) - I often read mails from another Aussie who punctuates as you do with a space before the mark - is it a national trait or just a pure coincidence ?
| Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3295 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | I'm so glad you mentioned Hoban as he came to mind as I read this but wasn't going to say for fear of showing I'd missed the point as I so often do in poetry.It's so satisfying when I can pick up on metaphors and I think this was an object lesson in using them in context. It is a bit frustrating for me as I'm sure there is more there so I may come back to it You instinctively know when you're reading quality. BTW I once wrote about Freud and my spell checker queried it and suggested fraud (perhaps Bill Gates wasn't a fan) cheers J | Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 8th January 2007 | So much already said. Like Witzl, I picked up on him avoiding too much self illumination. Fine work. Phil. | Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 9th January 2007 | Simply splendid. Rereading this there is such a sense of magic in 'Qashqa'i shekarlu' - really sparks the imagination. Elli | Written by francoise (129 comments posted) 11th January 2007 | this piece is far beyond anything ive tried writing myself.. and i have to say its subject matter did intimidate me alot, so much so that i found myself not wanting to read it at all! (sorry) but ive decided to pluck up my creative courage and after reading it several times out loud, i have to say i enjoyed it a great deal. I particularly liked the midsection of the last verse beginning and ending with the interrogatives, and I loved the closing line. it felt really good reading this out loud, the rhythm and pace flowed beautifully..and even though ive never heard of 'Qashqa'i shekarlu.. it felt good saying it! Fran |
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