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Poetry
Ice Age
By amanda4uk
08 January 2007
It’s time for me to go now,

Away from this place, this cold area,

Sea gulls fly in from the water,

The constantly bitter wind carries them along.

Will I be rescued from this chair,

Could I move from my window

Where I watch the seasons change?

I was numb,

I didn’t feel it firmly and completely take grip,

But now, looking down I see

Crisp, dry wrinkled skin on my hands,

My grinding bones ache,

Gone are the days of warmth.

Looking out from this ageing shell and down to the river,

The warm flame of the morning sun dances,

Bringing colours back into the weathered landscape.

As the rich beam of light reaches my feet

A shadow is cast, the blanket falls from my knees,

A familiar iciness runs along my flesh.

Still here, still here as always.

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Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 8th January 2007
Mandy, Mandy, Mandy! So cold and depressing! I had to put on a coat, gloves and hat just to read this! 
 
All a bit predictable for me - nothing very adventurous or imaginative.  
 
Seagulls is one word (you have a habit of doing that!)  
I don't really understand what you are saying in the middle, the bit about numbness and losing her grip - did the poor old soul fall? If not, and she's just sitting there, why are her bones grinding? A little more clarity young lady! 
 
Having said which, there is promise in your work. Keep writing! 
 
Oli 

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 8th January 2007
Actually, I quite liked this - but I've got a fixation on old age at the moment - don't know why. 
 
I liked the inevitability of this. When the sun came up, there was almost some hope, but it was soon dashed. 
 
Cold indeed. With Oli on the grinding bones. 
 
Phil.

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