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Without a Light
By vigormortis
11 January 2007
Insulting the moon leads to disasterous results.

    “You don’t even glow,” I told the moon. “You’re a liar. You just reflect.”
    The moon glared at me.
    “I glow.”
    “You’re illuminated but you don’t glow. You need your own light to glow.”
    “If I cast light, I glow. I glow,” he repeated. “I glow.”
    “We can have this conversation all night but when it comes down to it, you’re nothing but a substitute for the sun while he’s busy.”
    “You can’t look at the sun,” she said. “And I glow but I don’t burn.”
    “You couldn’t burn if you tried.”
    “I wouldn’t ever want to burn.”
    “But you can’t, and that’s what matters.”
    The moon glared at me, and for a moment I thought she really was glowing, but she was nothing but a liar and a fake and she was just reflecting someone else’s (much brighter) glow. She was big and fat and full of holes, and she hung around the stars pretending to be big. A star could fit a thousand moons, and stars glow, and the moon can only orbit around without anything to do. That’s what I told her.
    “I have plenty to do,” she told me.
    I waited in the field while the big fat moon settled back down to the horizon. The sun burst into the scene with a violently orange rise; I cheered, and I waited for him to come into full view. I couldn’t look directly at him, but I smiled and let the warm rays rinse the night off my face.
    I spent the day telling the sun about the moon, because they’d never really met. He didn’t have much to say to me, because he’s very busy, but he did keep me warm and lit my way around the field while I picked berries. I ate berries all day until there were no more berries left in the field, and I tossed the very last one to the sun, because he was helpful enough to guide my way. He didn’t take it, though, and it fell back into the grass.
    There was a brilliant display of purple as the sun went down, then a couple stars twinkled awake but the moon did not come out. I waited for a little while, but the moon was not there. I called out, and there was no reply.
    After an hour of darkness without any illumination at all, I became concerned. I heard some rustling around the field, but I couldn’t see who was there.
    “Moon?” I called out.
    “Is that a berry?” came a voice from somewhere in the grass.
    “No,” I replied, “I’m a boy. Who are you, and what have you done with the moon?”
    “The moon is new tonight, and she is very shy when he’s being reborn. Are you sure you are not a berry? You smell very much like a berry.”
    “I assure you,” I told him, “I am not a berry. I can’t see you.”
    “If you were a bear, you would be able to smell me.”
    “I am not a bear, I am a boy, and I would very much like the moon to come out because I cannot see you. Are you a bear?”
    “I think you are a berry that doesn’t want to be eaten.”
    “I can give you a berry, I offered one to the sun, but he didn’t want it and he gave
it back. I could find it if the moon was here. Moon! Moon!”
    The moon did not reply, and the someone sneaking around snuck awfully close. A set of big strong teeth clamped down into my arm.
    “You are not a berry!” came an astonished growl. It hurried away, noisily thudding against the earth in its haste.
    “I told you!” I shouted. “That’s what I was trying to tell you!”
    Suddenly dizzy and dripping thickly from my arm, I clutched it tightly against my chest and held my breath until it numbed down to a dull throb of pain. The swell of sleep came over me, and the stars began to rock back and forth until I closed my eyes and let my body fall into the grass. I thought for a moment my arm might have been snapped right off, but it was there, attached by frayed tendons, the nerves dulled by a band of punctures wrapped near the shoulder.
    “Moon, come back,” I pleaded drearily. “I can’t sleep without a light.”

Reviews

Written by Snodlander (507 comments posted) 11th January 2007
I found this an unusual and compelling story. I thought it had overtones of mythology about it. I loved the argument with the moon, and the thought that it might sulk. 
 
'She was big and fat and full of holes, and she hung around the stars pretending to be big.' Great line. 
 
'and she is very shy when he’s being reborn'. Confusion of gender. In fact, you refer to it as he a couple of times, but the rest as a she. 
 
Good job!
Well ...
Written by johniebg (553 comments posted) 11th January 2007
Very good, loved the arguement at the beginning, all the dialogue and the same tone with the owner of the teeth. Very imaginative and wanted more ... 
 
Through the whole story I was quite happy thinking this might be a scarecrow, I thought the biting of the boys arm unnecessary, added a dimension to the story that i wasnt ready for, also as soon as it was a boy I immediately wanted to know who. 
 
Really, really good, needs to be longer, absolutely loved the bit with throwing the berry to the sun and it falling to the ground. 

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 11th January 2007
Maybe I'm in a particularly uncritical mood today, but the only fault I could find with this was the gender confusion Snodlander has already pointed out. I too loved the argument, the general tone of the story, the berry tossed to the sun, the description of the moon. I thought the length was fine, but I would not have minded one bit if this had been longer.
Hmmm
Written by TwistedTales (548 comments posted) 12th January 2007
I agree with Johnie, the introduction of the boy seemed to me to be a little forced on the story unnecessarily, the conversation with the moon and the description of the sun is very nicely done, would have liked a longer piece too, and a big gender mismatch...felt as if the moon is a eunuch... 
 
But overall the whole concept was pretty wicke i guess, very nice and very original..refreshing if i may add.  
 
Chill, 
TT

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 14th January 2007
Enjoyed this very much. Johnie's ideas about the introduction of the boy could be valid, but it does work the way you've written it. 
 
Touches of mythology as Witzl said. 
 
Phil.

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