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By rach
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11 January 2007 |
Written in a japanese style Innocent water droplets, Strictly hardened, sharply cruel, Stilled in time, relics, Feeling thawed now finding home, Like to like, journey begun. |
Written by Phil (6645 comments posted) 11th January 2007 | Something very pleasant about this, but irritatingly, I can't put my finger on it. Liked the second line particularly.
Sp: hardened, not hardend (insert puerile joke here)
Phil. |
Written by rach (8 comments posted) 11th January 2007 | | typical.... will try and sort out my spelling...thanks for taking the time to read it anyway. |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th January 2007 | Yes there is something about this that catches the imagination. I stumbled a bit over 'feeling thawed now finding home' but overall I liked this a very condensed piece and, though I'm far from expert to me you captured the concise Japanese style well.
Elli |
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