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Like Bees Around A Honey Pot
By sara
15 June 2005

In a crowded rowdy pub
someone's daughter or wife
is stripping off to strangers -
her only real option in life

They beg "Come on darling,
show us what you've got" -
Like bees around a honey pot

While her children are asleep
she's trying to earn some money
It's all a bit of harmless fun -
but to her it isn't funny

They beg "Come on sweetheart,
your body's really hot" -
Like bees around a honey pot

A drunk tries a quick grope
and the male mob howls for more
she puts on her self-respect with her coat
and returns to her kids with a score

They beg "Come back gorgeous,
we want to see the lot" -
Like bees around a honey pot

 

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hard hitting
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 16th June 2005
Hi, I have read your first four post and wish to say that I find them excellent 
Very brutal, hard, truthful, if this is you I salute your courage and fortitude bothin letting us know your story and for coming through that hell you have written about 
Bernie

Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 27th June 2005
I have to agree with Bernie, I found this hard hitting and moving. This has taken some guts to write and I take my hat off to you. 
 
LL :)

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