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Thor

By Fledermaus

11 January 2007

Lightning flashes, thunder rolls
And its heavy roar resounds
The destroyer hunts the trolls
He crushes hills, smashes mounts

Of course by now we all know
It is not a deity so brave
Electricity runs this show
Thunder a sonic shockwave

Myth replaced by cold reason
Cast into a deep ravine
Gone the romantic season
When weather was still divine

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Thor but thatisfied
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3567 comments posted) 11th January 2007

So what are you saying? Are you saying that Thor, Odin and the other deities do not exist? Kill the Heretic,burn him! What is this electricity of which you speak? It is but a plaything of the great Thor.
You're just an old romantic at heart.sweetie. This is my sort of poem; it rhymes, scans and makes a statement
cheers
J

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 11th January 2007

Quite liked this Fleders. Science spoils a lot of ideas - but it doesn't make the ideas not worth exploring.

BBS mentioned rhyming. Good scheme, but a little disappointed that your last rhyme didn't quite make it. Had it not been the last pair I don't think it would have mattered. Perhaps it doesn't anyway. (Ravine, divine)

Phil.

Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 12th January 2007

And you even wrote this on Thorsday!

Batty but nice.

Oli

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 12th January 2007

Sorry to start out away from the piece but I have to say that 'Thor but thatisfied' is one of the best review titles I've seen in a long time!!!

Nice piece - I liked the idea and didn't object particularly to the spelling rhymes. Neat and I thought the last line was clever.

Elli

Written by Fledermaus (3488 comments posted) 16th January 2007

Thanks BBS, Phil, Oli and Elli.
Indeed the rhyme was a bit of a problem, especially in the lines which Phil mentions.

Thanks for your comments.

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