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Poetry
Mannequin
By roxyhope
12 January 2007

Like fallen angels,
removed from heaven's grace,
here we stand before you
in the shadows of darkness
slowly wilting away
not a ray or sunshine
nor a drop of refreshing rain adorning
our pathetic existence.
With perfect poise,
 left for the world to pass judgement upon us,
we endure this inevitable fate...
Long ago our battle was lost
because we refused to conform to the standards of immortality.
We left utopia to find the meaning of life,
only to find the heartbreak of it all.
So now, perfectly posed,
we have become your mannequins.
No emotions shall ever honour these beautiful faces
because we have forgotten how to feel.
A wall has been built up around our hearts to prevent
any further harm to already weakened souls.
Glossy eyes stare back at all of you as
you admire our elegance and wonder what hides beneath our blank faces,
but that answer will never be found.

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Back to Barbie!
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 12th January 2007
For what is dear Barbie but a mini-mannequin?  
 
Can one "adorn" an existence 
 
"standards of (im)morality? Not for me...no, no, no! 
 
This doesn't connect with me - leaves me confused. 
 
Oli :)

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 12th January 2007
There are confusing bits here, true, but on the whole I liked this very much. I got an image of a lot of mannequins left out in the rain, naked, soaked to their plastic skins, but still smiling.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 12th January 2007
I like witzl's image and I think I like the basic idea you've got here but for me it got a bit swamped by unnecessary bits and I thought the structure and layout hindered understanding a bit in places. I liked the penultimate two lines but thought you could maybe have dropped the last line. 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 12th January 2007
If you can make the fantastical jump, this is a pretty good piece. Yes, Elli is right about the last line, Oli is right to be confused - but it does leave a stong picture in the mind. 
 
Phil.
Afterthought.
Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 12th January 2007
Afterthought II.
Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 12th January 2007
(Stupid bloody computer. 
 
I'm not sure the centring helps this. It certainly does add meaning. 

Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 12th January 2007
Well, well, well Ms Rox, comment I must. Forget ‘Talisker’ the man has no soul (a joke). Witzl; wow what a sexy image (for me). ---- OK I see two images, one of two creatures sharing space. (Like many do when they grow apart together in a cold place, during a long winter.). I see another of a country in a bind over foreign conflicts. Don’t put me straight; I’m happy with my two and I love Witzl’s offering. ----  
 
You know Rox; I know heaps (about very little) I read a comment by Witzl once where she described growing up in CA to someone who grow up in ND (or something like that). You can take that up if you (both) wish. Regards, wattle ---- (oh almost forgot: I love your poem - full marks) 

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