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In The Concrete Jungle
By sara
15 June 2005

In the concrete jungle                                                                                          
families live six to a room
with damp creeping up the walls
and desperation creeping everywhere

In the concrete jungle
youngsters go searching for jobs
ten thousand at one interview
what chance have they got ?

In the concrete jungle
she has to work the streets
never dreamed she'd resort to this
to feed her hungry kids

In the concrete jungle
the dark brings evil and crime
daren't walk around a corner
for fear of losing your life

In the concrete jungle
life just gets you down
and no one pulls you up again
they watch you slowly drown


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Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 16th June 2005
I like lines 3 and 4 - thought them very effective. The central jungle metaphor is not really extended or expanded upon, although the sentiment is all too painfully real, and the reality a daily occurance. The drowning metaphor is unexpected at the end because it refers to water, and usually, that is the life force of any jungle. Yet it doesnt provide hope for those in the concrete version. Perhaps that adds to the despair...
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Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 16th June 2005
excellent piece

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