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In The Hands Of A Stranger
By pandora
13 January 2007
Any comments and critiques appreciated.

IN THE HANDS OF A STRANGER


If given
the chance
choice
the voice

I’d trade my life for
the vision
ambition
decision

Give away the
months
days
the years

Face my fears
the pain
past
the tears

Ask a stranger
to take a risk
gamble
grant a favor

Announce the story
in truth
fact
in glory

Realize my dream
the purpose
plan
the scheme

Give my all
my body
mind
my soul

to god above so I can reach my goal

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Written by rach (8 comments posted) 13th January 2007
:grin i like the way this set out because it makes it more dramatic, and its kinda nice to know, since ive read a few poems that have the same kinda concept, that your not running out to cheat on your husband etc. its deeper than that or at least it was when i read it

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 13th January 2007
I had to start twice on this; due to lack of punctuation I misread the first time. Your choice of course, but punctuating always clarifies meaning. 
 
I liked the rhythm of this but as I read on I became more and more uncomfortable with the content. As above, your choice; but makng your own decisions adds meaning. 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1786 comments posted) 14th January 2007
Interesting idea - I didn't like the short lines, ruined the read in places for me - too choppy. It was alos a little black and white - I'd have liked a bit more ambiguity but an interesting concept nonetheless and thought provoking 
 
Elli

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