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| Arms of the Angel - 5 | |
| By Storywriter1987 | ||||||||||
| 13 January 2007 | ||||||||||
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Hi guys, Chapter 5 for you all. I am sorry about the way it turned out! “He certainly is. He’s been my brother…… well, since I was born really. Have you got a problem with that?” “No. I just never guessed. Why do you two have different names then?” “It was decided and I wanted it changed. It’s a long story. Lets just say past times weren’t as good as they could have been.” “So David is your brother and I fancy him. So that’s fine that you fancy my brother then.” “I beg your pardon. You’ve got a brother?” “Yes. Dom. I used to have a sister called Suzie, but she …” “Died. Car crash. He said but I didn’t make the link, we’ve known each other all these years and you never told me.” “You have to come tonight please, its leavers dance. Please darling. I wont say anything about ‘it’, the thing that happened yesterday, but if you don’t go then I’ll be forced to tell Dom Everything! So, what is it gonna be……” “I’ll go. I know he’ll be upset if I don’t go. And besides I’m ready.” At that moment there was a knock on the door. Ella went and opened it and there stood David. He came in after giving her a hug, kiss and a red rose. Always the romantic one was our David. “Hello gorgeous. You look fantastic.” “Ahem! Missed something?” “Hello sis. You look beautiful, as always. Don’t start blushing. You know to me you are always beautiful.” “Thank you. You don’t scrub up too bad yourself. Very nice.” There followed another knock on the door, Dom. Hugs, kisses and compliments al round and then he turned round and saw me. He stopped dead. I couldn’t read the expression in his eyes. He just stood staring at me. Was that good or bad? God only knows. “Wow. You look…..Wow!” “Thank you. You don’t’ look too bad yourself.” “I’m nothing compared to you. Here this is for you.” “Thank you. I’ll put it in a vase by my bed.” “Are we ready to go then? Lisa? You ready?” “Yes Ella. Lets go.” We got there and I had a great time. I had a few dances with David and one with Ella and a few slow ones with Dom. he held me tightly but gently and so close I wrapped my arms round his neck and closed my eyes. He smelt so good. He was the one for me. I knew it I just didn’t really want to accept it. Will – the ex – had been a horrid, nasty piece of work and had hurt me to the core but being with Dom was different. He loved me, cared for me and wanted me just the way I was. We stayed linked together like this for about 30 mins. We didn’t care about the world around us. It was just us. No one else. Me and Dom, together forever. So the night seemed to go without a hitch until I decided I needed the loo. It was there I met Debbie. The Uni bully. Tall, blonde, skinny as anything and after Dom. Well after every guy in the place. She was beautiful, don’t get me wrong. She came over to me at the sinks and did her make up and then got her glass, filled it with water and tipped it all over me. She didn’t just do it once, she did it 6 times. I was soaked and then she covered me in the soap from the dispenser, it was all in my hair and my dress was ruined. “Keep off Dom. He wants me, he told me so himself. He wants a real woman not a fat bitch like you. He just hasn’t realised it yet. You really thought he wanted you. God you can be so gullible sometimes. You’re nothing, scum. Will had the right idea, treat you as you deserve. Like a bit of dirt on the bottom of his shoe. You don’t deserve to live. Go and kill yourself and make us all happy.” Her laugh was menacing and I ran out of the toilets and into Dom. he had been coming to look for me. I made his suit all sticky and so I ran all the way back to my dorm. I slammed the door shut and leaned against it. Then slid down as my heart burst and I started to cry. I wondered why I was crying and then I realised why… Debbie was right, I wasn’t meant to be happy. I walked to the kitchen and picked up the bread knife…..
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