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By sara
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15 June 2005 |
The pubs close I wait in fear
He staggers home
Fumbling door keys
Stumbling and swearing
Then he starts on me
Hurling abuse
Flying fists
Powerful punches
Beaten black and blue His usual apologies
His artificial tears
His superficial guilt
He's so ashamed
He must have been drunk
And he promises
it won't happen again
He's so sorry
He does love me The pubs open |
power and poignant and oh-so-true
Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 15th June 2005 | | i like the way this poem is not adorned with the uneccesary trappings that usual poetic pieces offer - simply told with a devastating resonance which is both chillingly real and poignantly honest. | comment
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 16th June 2005 | | brutal, hard hitting, tragic, very good |
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 17th June 2005 | Thanks for your comments alandavidpritchard and maipenrai
Could anyone advise me on how to alter the line spacing when putting on a new poem, I don't like the double spacing ! Or is it possible to write them in Word and then insert them ? Would be grateful for any help
Many Thanks, Sara | honest
Written by umbugjug (46 comments posted) 17th June 2005 | moving, and i think this is all the better for being straightforward.
and, if you press shift and enter it goes onto the next line. | Thanks umbugjug
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 17th June 2005 | Thanks for your comments and for your practical advice about line spacing - will try it
sara | Devastating
Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 19th June 2005 | I find domestic violence poems always difficult to read.
Having been through this myself I can only sympathise with you. A disturbing poem yet so very true and well written.
LL |
Written by darrenmc (54 comments posted) 24th June 2005 | | yeah, very good, disturbing, but what is also disturbing is the title attracted twice as many hits as your other poems.... i dont know, i know sex attracts and sells, is violence just as much a seller u think? of course, look at hollywood.... |
Written by julie (21 comments posted) 26th June 2006 | | Such a true to life poem well written it is brilliant |
Written by twriter (117 comments posted) 19th August 2006 | That was gripping and, although I could see the ending, genuinely shocking. Well done!
TW |
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