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Ice Crystals
By pandora
16 January 2007
Just looking for critiques...

Ice Crystals


A collision of mind, a crash of the soul,

dissection of heart, I have lost all control.


Languish of sight, power over feeling,

rigorous struggle, no chance of healing.


No negotiation, rape what you haunt,

nightmare of shadows, take what you want.


Fear of the fury, manipulate the pain,

up-rise of anger, exorcise the sane.


Death of innocence, no omission of guilt,

onslaught of tears, in this life that I built.






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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 16th January 2007
Very sorry Pandora, I just couldn't connect at all. I'm all for making the reader work a little, but for dunces like me, the clues have to be a somewhat clearer. 
 
Phil.

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