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The Fall of A Giant
By Talisker
16 January 2007
For Big Graham

RIP 14/01/07

He was a colossus of a man.
A triton among minnows
in the main stand.

The scarf of maroon and white,
wrapped around his bull neck,
looked like a pencil tie.

It was a hell of a game.
The sea of faces
ebbed and flowed
with the play.

Then suddenly he toppled.
Like a giant sequoia felled,
taking others with him,
floundering,
helpless,
dying.

For a moment
attention turned to the big man.
Then returned to the game.


Oli 16/01/07

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Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 16th January 2007
Not really sure what to make of this one. As usual, there's nothing wrong with the way you write, but I don't quite know what to feel. Big Graham bites the dust mid match, tragic. He even has his moment of glory and attention, not that he'd know it. And then he's gone and everyone focuses on frippery again. Am I missing something, or digging too deep? 
 
I like the way this flows from the specific of the person, to crowd, to person, to crowd. 
 
All the best, Phil.

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 16th January 2007
Sorry Oli, it just occurred Big Graham may be a pal. If so, I'm sorry. Phil.

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